A Moment In Childhood...Not Forgotten

A Moment In Childhood...Not Forgotten

A Poem by Ahnjolie McKenna

A Moment In Childhood...Not Forgotten

The inverse world doth secretly
Exist in mirrored frames...
Casting not a true reflection
Of its Wonderland perplexion,
Upside-down, silvered perfection
Alice fiercely proclaims.
~
This book first fell into her hands
Whilst she was but a child.
Five years young, beset by sorrow,
No sweet moments left to borrow,
Breathless life with no tomorrow...
Her mother's soul exiled.
~
But, she would not acknowledge death,
Whereby all love is lost.
Her solitude would fair define
Imagination by design...
For ev'ry dream she did enshrine,
Were memories embossed.
~
If rabbit holes were sweet escapes
She tumbled through alone...
Perhaps a looking glass could be
As simple as a master key,
Unlocking the dark mystery
Of afterlife unknown.
~
Her focus was so absolute
Within this happy room...
Observing that each portrait faced
The mantlepiece, with mirror placed
Inside a walnut frame embraced,
A family heirloom.
~
Possessed of childlike confidence
Where magic did impel...
She inched the sturdy parlor chair
Across the wooden floor with care,
Whilst wishing Tinkerbelle were there
To cast a flying spell.
~
As the stone hearth did welcome her,
The task was brought to scale...
She quickly climbed upon the seat,
Then straightened steady on two feet,
Whilst reaching upward, palm to meet
The mantlepiece and rail.
~
She stepped upon the chairs soft arm
To gain much needed height.
'Twas then she heard the dinner bell,
So sudden, that she nearly fell...
But not a gasp didst she expel,
Struggling to keep upright.
~
Impossibility ignored,
She did proceed as planned.
Trusting in her comprehension
Of the book's central dimension...
And her mother's brief suspension
Within this hidden land.
~
As her breath did mark the mirror,
Small fingers pressed the glass.
A moment gone...and then the next,
Her brow did furrow, quite perplexed...
A tear within each eye collects,
Accepting the impasse.
~
With a sigh of resignation,
She carefully stepped down.
And as she slowly walks away,
Her fantasy did logic slay...
And hopeful innocence would stay
To keep sweet childhood's crown.

© 2018 Ahnjolie McKenna


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I love this! So very descriptive. Damn logic always gets in the way! great work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


this conveys what you love best about your childhood with vivid great detail

Posted 6 Years Ago


Another excellent piece Ahnjolie. The story you share here is vivid with great detail as usual. I have some questions maybe you could clear up?

Shed didst proceed as planned. (should that be she'd?)
In the lines:
(She carefully stepped down.
And as she slowly walks away,)



Would the first line be past tense
and the second be present intentionally? I might be too litteral when I write, so I would have wrote And she slowly walked away.

mirrow? (second to last stanza).

Like Richard, you also use the old style language which I like.
Whilst, didst, ev'ry. Perhaps I'll use these words someday. :)

I always enjoy seeing a new poem from you. I know you said you may be leaving but I for one will surely miss you. But you (along with Richard) have inspired me and for that I thank you. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

You are incredibly sweet...thank you. When I originally posted this piece, I noticed later that day.. read more
Relic

6 Years Ago

Who's complaining? hahaha You never disappoint, love. :)
Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

Smiling... you are too precious.
Soft kiss for you...
Ahnjolie
you took me to another time realm and place in this sweet sweet poem
you have a great imagination and the ability to paint a picture as we read it
no pictures or music needed on your poem here to enhance its beauty
i love this
thankyou so much

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words...I am so happy that you are able to see the memory that I tried to tr.. read more
My-MY, Dear Ahnjolie!
In this, the wonderment of your mystically beautiful, incomparably creative mind, heart, and soul sweep us up into a magical journey through a young girl's vividly enthralling kaleidoscope imagination.
It's no wonder, now, as a woman, you compose such amazingly wondrous poetry … just look at all the time you've had to blossom forth into the full-fledged, master poetess you've become.
The Sestet form and 8-count meter you selected for this piece is absolutely perfect for its ambiance, mystique, easy, seamless flow, and in your own uniquely pleasing rhyme-scheme of xbcccb its sheer poetic genius, the cute little tilde dividers between each verse add a nice touch, and what a splendidly perfect picture (how nice it would be displayed above your tile to keep the magical atmospheric imagery present).
Ahnjolie, you've taken us so sweetly, so deeply, into the imaginative mind and heart of this young girl, allowing us into her most personal daydream moments between she and her mirror … how sacredly precious this privilege is for your readers to share. I am both honored and thrilled, not only by sharing this amazing tale, but by the skill in which your poetic excellence, vivid imagery, and eloquence, all combine to make me feel as though I were present with her in her moments.

A huge thank you hug for this very sweet treat, our fine lady-poet … what a marvelous highlight poem this would be in a children's book.
Sheer captivatingly pure, poetic brilliance … thank You, Dear Ahnjolie ⁓ Richard :*)


Techy grammar/syntax hints: : )
V1 L6, consider, "Alice fiercely proclaims."
V10 L5, consider, "A tear within each eye collects,

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

Many sincere thanks, dear Richard...
As always, I am honoured by the kindness of your words r.. read more
Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

You make reading and sharing a pleasure, Ahnjolie … my thanks to thee, as-well. : )
Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Thank you most humbly, too, Dear Ahnjolie, for using my little hints. 😊
this is a great story,i could see her there in her room living in her fantasy world

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

Smiling...thank you, love. Actually...it is my own childhood memory. I still find myself touching .. read more
 wordman

6 Years Ago

well, hope you see a big smile in that mirror
I wondered when you'd post again,
For your ingenious rhymes
Are soothing til the final dot
And quite enchanting in their plot-
Like this: the Lady of Shalott
Meets Alice - most sublime!

Yet I must say you do again
Commit the grave mistake
Of saying "didst" and "couldst" when they
The second singular convey,
'Tis "did" and "could" what you should say,
And that would ice the cake.

But overall, this poem proves
That you're a brilliant bard,
Who seems indeed not from this age,
A witty and romantic sage,
With forms that look upon the page
So intricate and hard.

- Just careful with the second singular conjugations that should be third (and also words that land on the wrong sylLAbles, for they tend to ruin the poems power). Well done!


Posted 6 Years Ago


Ahnjolie McKenna

6 Years Ago

Smiling...thank you for your most beautiful review. I am impressed with how effortlessly you compos.. read more
emipoemi

6 Years Ago

I pride in it being a talent of mine. Thank you for sharing your work. They're indeed a pleasure to .. read more

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