Heat

My attempt at a sensual poem.

The thought of you 

Consumes me and 

Heats my body as 

I think about every

Time we touched

In ecstacy combining

Our heat and our

Love as we express

Each and every one

Of our desires carnally

And in the moment

We grip each other

Feeling our bodies 

Take over as our

Minds and souls

Become numb

To the please 

As we continue

To reach newer

Elevations of

Sensation and

Heat that flows

Through us like

Wet hot magma

Of emotion and

Lust that flows

Never ending

And always 

Building until

That sudden

Climax of 

Emotions

Sensations

Taking control

Over me and 

Over you as 

We dance the

Dance of lovers

Tonight as we

Shall dance until

We both lay in a 

Heap of disheveled

Pleasure as we 

Descend into 

Each other as 

We begin to 

Assimilate what

Happened we 

Draw to the 

Conclusion 

We must do

This dance

More often

Until we climax

Once again

In a heap of

Pleasure and heat

Reviews

[Mary]

passionate! well done, well done

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you. I am glad you really liked it.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow cool I just posted one not long ago about heat its uncanny. I love this so full of passion and desire.

[Ahmad Cox]

I am glad you could appreciate. I usually don't write them so I wanted to write something different.

[Carolann Dowsett]

:-)

[Gray Witch]

I understood it all Ahmad... Laters :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you. :)

[Lily Mae]

Wonderful and very sensual.. Nice job Ahmad..xo

[Ahmad Cox]

I am glad. I wasn't quite sure how people would take this one.

[Dalia]

very nice write , liked it.

[Ahmad Cox]

Yay. :)

[Androglossia]

Congratulations on your first attempt! This is well versed Ahmad but there is still diffidence on it that seemed to obstruct the essense of sensuality. But perhaps it is how you wanted it to be:)

[Ahmad Cox]

Hehe or maybe I am just someone stabbing in the dark and hoping they got it right.

[runningturtle87]

Good architecture in your verses.....thank you.

[Ahmad Cox]

I know this is a step away from what I normally write but I wanted to post a more sensual poem just to try it out so hopefully it wasn't too much of a failure but I will probably stick to writing mostly inspirational. Its what I tend to be better at writing. ;)

[Frieda P]

This is certainly different for you my friend. It's hot, but who 'assimilates' after hot torrid sex? You took me from floating to clinical in seconds flat. Must be the snow or something today....not feeling how you finished it up. I knew where you were trying to go with it, but in my humble opinion, after that stanza, it left me up in the air. And what's 'carnally'? I'm going back to bed I think, before I get myself in more hot water, you know I love you nonetheless! ;-)

[Ahmad Cox]

Hehe I know I was trying but maybe I should just stick to my more inspirational poems and leave the more sensual ones to the experts but at least I gave it a shot.

[MandaBear]

Very nice poem. =) I liked it

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you. Its a different poem from the norm but I wanted to step away from what I am used to so I am glad you liked it.

[MandaBear]

Well, I think you did a good job=)