Sitting in Love

Another attempt at a love poem.

Sitting in Love

We will sit in love tonight my dear
Reveling in the feeling
Of our bodies intertwining
Combing as one as our souls
Make love tonight
Feeling you intertwined in me
As we writhe in orgasmic pleasure
Our bodies melting into each other
As we climb newer heights
Creating new ways to love
With each different touch
With each different kiss
With every thrust
With every ounce of pleasure
We get a little closer
To the divine

Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

It was ok. The structure though was kinda off. no punctuations and you might wanna correct the "Reveling" i think it's supposed to be "revealing". Apart from that the contents of the poem showed beautiful expressions of affection... I enjoyed it..

[Barbara Walker]

In the fourth line did you mean combining? Otherwise I didn't understand that line. Nice write!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Very sensual and seductive. I like it, nice work.

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you

[Mia]

A wonderful attempt at that :) Lovely job, it's sweet and tender with a touch of passion!

[Amanda]

Nice job friend :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you

[Sunny Skye]

Nicely done. I like your choice of words. Good job!

-SkyeBlanco