Wonderland

Ahmad Cox · 1 second ago

Wonderland

This world is a wonderland
Its a wonder to behold
This wonderful
Beautiful place
We all call home
Its a wonder 
To be alive
A wonder
To be here
A wonder
To get the chance
To learn
To grow
To thrive
To struggle
Getting closer
To the truth
Of everything death
Accepting  life
Accepting everyone
Accepting yourself
And accepting
The love
And the truth
And sharing
That beauty
With others

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Did you mean to end the fifth line with "home"? You have the word "come."
This flows well Nice write.

[NicoDaDon]

Great mood setter Fam..!

[Mia]

This is lovely! I really like it. You have such a discerning mind. It's always a pleasure reading your poetry. The one line confused me..."We all call come"...I'm not sure what you mean. Did you mean home instead of come? Other than that, this is great!

[Ahmad Cox]

Yeah I did. Unfortunately its a typo

[Mia]

Aaha, the sentence makes sense with 'home'. One mistake does not take away for this poem. Like I said I think it’s great.

[Cynthia Man]

You've crafted a really beautiful world full of wonder...But then people needs a lot of courage and promises to fulfill this conditions, there're a lot of people who refuse to put down and continue on hating... Making a wonderland needs so much...
Anyways, it's great...Nice written :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Yep. We must create it for ourselves first

[Soul Fire]

Lovely.. always wanted my own wonderland..

[Ahmad Cox]

Its in your heart

[Soul Fire]

I've always wanted to go to Alice's Wonderland ;3 and Neverland too.

[Androglossia]

You have described a whole word with such brevity and I liked it. The only thing I would like to point out is the 5th line "We all call come", should it be written as is or We all call home? Anyway, this is really good. Thank you for sharing.

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you but no it isn't meant to be a question but thanks for your positive comments

[Androglossia]

No, I mean is it come or home? We all call come or We all call home?

[Ahmad Cox]

Oh I see what you mean

[Allycat]

I really love the flow of this poem, and the message this piece has. It's wonderful
thank you for sharing :)

[Ahmad Cox]

No problem. Thanks for sharing your poetry as well.

[afra]

great write ...its beautiful ...well done

[Ahmad Cox]

Thank you

[Amanda]

It is a wonder to be here. Great job, keep em coming haha :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Every one here is wonderful. You are pretty cool yourself

[Ahmad Cox]

Everyone here is wonderful. You are pretty cool yourself.

[Amanda]

Thanks haha :)