Fall of an Empire

"Heavenly sword"

Fall of an Empire

He got up

with blood dripping                                     

not to mention                  

His skin ripping

His kingdom underwent stripping       

 the last of the men, hopes dripping   

The rivals needed an extension                             

though they prayed to the ascension

Where the king dies the kingdom lies                                

unprotected from the allies                                                   

a new empire shall raise        

from the grave of the previous lives

But he shall not die                           

to watch the rival take prize              

the pride of wisdom, stay wise                                     

don’t give up nor let out cries

Stay strong and protective he chants                 

as he rises for the blood of infants         

born to wisdom a man shall serve,              

serve till his people deserve

His pride he shall reserve 

for days to come and preserve                              

honesty will observe                                                                 

a dying king doesn't conserve

For his kingdom, people and love                          

his life, they deserve…

Ahena MK 

Reviews

[Rida Sarwar]

Loved it :) deep! Very nice :)

[Ahena MK]

Thanks a lot !!!

[writ rajat]

A few of the rhymes might be a bit forced, but I do really like your rhyming scheme! And the way you have positioned your few un-rhymed lines makes them stand out I wish your people the best as you chose your leaders this coming May. Beautifully penned dear! Just loved it.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the summary of the two... ;) thanks for reading ...

[writ rajat]

you r velkam

[Rachelle]

The mark of a true leader is his devotion and loyalty to his people. It is hard to come by one these days in any part of the world. I wish your people the best as you chose your leaders this coming May.

[Ahena MK]

I completely agree with you ... Thanks for the wishes ... :)
Ahena ;)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow! This is a display of pure talent. Awesome job!

[Ahena MK]

Thank you .... :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Stay strong and protective he chants
as he rises for the blood of infants
born to wisdom a man shall serve,
serve till his people deserve "
These are true word about war. Blood of children keep the hope of dead soldiers. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Ahena MK]

Thanks coyote for the wonderful words ... ;)

[mahima]

Beautifully penned dear! Just loved it.

[Ahena MK]

Thank you ..... ;)

[mahima]

Your welcome:)

[s y e]

// Stay strong and protective he chants
as he rises for the blood of infants
born to wisdom a man shall serve,
serve till his people deserve //

Lovely job, I loved this stanza above, it made an impact!

[wordman]

the making of a good book or movie loved the graphics

[Ahena MK]

Thank you .... ;)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This would make a very good premise, poem or possibly even a prophecy for a fantasy novel

[Ahena MK]

Oh! Thanks so much...