The Room Darkened ...

"it's a hundred words long..."

                        The room darkened

I picked up the gun from the table and threw it onto the floor. Quite away, as far as I could throw from the obtruder. This was it, do or die and I did.

He smoked his cigar lifting his stained and worn out mustache as he did. I stared at the sfocato eyes which looked like the eyes of a dull hungry bat craving for blood. His thick fingers filled with grease at every fold made a crackling noise as it unfolded

I watched as the hand reached out and watched till it neared my throat

I tried…

                                               - Ahena Mk 

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

Ouch! Not a place I want to be...
Your words brought about the feeling of terror
A

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Really dark Athena...continue writing! :)

[Frieda P]

Woo chills just ran up my spine, your pen and was locked and loaded for this one! I love 'sfocato eyes', packs a punch....

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the wonderful review ... ;)

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, I like the dark side of you too muchly, one of my favorites. :-)

[mahima]

Nice flow of emotions ahena.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks muchly

[mahima]

Your welcome.....

[Rehan Roy]

A mystifying gory story. I'm curious to read more.

[Ahena MK]

glad you liked it !!

[Costa Siwale]

Dreary, my kind of stuff, I enjoyed this one. Well done

[Ahena MK]

Thanks ...

[LadyAnn68]

Very scary and imagery left to the reader...pretty good.

[Ahena MK]

Thank you.....

[m.s.early]

very compelling and mysterious. i like trail off at the end

I wonder however should "dull hungry bat carving for blood" be "dull hungry bat cRAving for blood"

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading and the correction... just a typing mistake!! it was meant to be craving itself...
ahena :)

[Leslie Philibert]

an enigmatic fragment of a thriller, notice you use the US spelling of moustache..

[Ahena MK]

oh !! thanks for reading !!

[Scott Metro]

Very strange...very dark...
A bit of a course change for you I think..
I enjoyed it.
Scott

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for reading..

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott.......