The Fountain of GOD

The fountain of god 

 

The fountain of god 

That begins at the lock

Brings purity from the top

Spreading love till the dock

 

Across the nations people fly 

Leaving everything in their life

From their children and beloved wives

To the fountain of god they fly 

 

A holy dip to take 

Like god's hand they shake 

Another birth, they awake 

Their past sins now fake 

 

Into the river some often throw 

Money for the gods to row 

Their love for holy to show 

How humble they are, really low 

 

Across the river the money flow 

In the water the money glow 

All the poor across the shore 

Run in to get a bucket more 

 

Into the water a bags they hold

All the money, for those it's gold 

No need to work and get things sold 

Thanks to the fountain as the god told 

                                   - Ahena MK 

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

I read an in between link between God and money.. It is definitely intriguing and well penned. The rhyme gives it pace and makes it flow which doubles up the the content and context of your writing.
A

[mahima]

Surely true, good job ahena. The picture is a beauty!!

[Ahena MK]

Hohoho .... Thanks muchly mahima .... :)

[mahima]

Your welcome dear.........

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Splendid writing & so stimulating to read
anne

[Ahena MK]

Glad you liked it ... ;)
Ahena

[Great Aunt Astri]

THe photograph helped me get a clear picture across. It is fun to play with rhymes and syllables and I think your poem worked well. Good for you.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for reading ...

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

Very well written I can say..because everytime i read your work i find them deeply stimlulating yet hard to understand the depth and sanctity of the lines..May be I have to be older and wise enough for that..
Anyway the picture of rich and poor is perfect!! Great work!!

[Ahena MK]

thanks for the time and wonderful review !!!!! glad you liked !!
ahena :)

[ferousfinite]

Constructive: I would avoid using "that" as an interjection; the 1st two stanzas do not match the last formation. They are completely different styles (unless this is what you intended and this would be your finesse). I really like the 3rd and 4th stanza: "like wrapping paper" : . Punctuation will complete this flow, just a touch of word variations and It's done! However, by leaving this alone and NOT changing anything, will leave a milestone of your writing ability into your timeline.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the review !! ill look into it !! and also the first two stanzas are intentional ..... thanks for reading and for the time !!

[Sami Khalil]

"Brings purity from the top
Spreading love till the dock

Across the nations people fly"

Splendid....................

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................

[Himanshu shekhar]

Really good!! Just mindblowing, just awsome.no word

[Ahena MK]

glad you liked it !!

[icelandicblue]

Your spirit and faith pour from the fountain of your words.

[Ahena MK]

Hahaha ... Thanks