Undecided

"occupation confusion"

My life ...

Undecided

Time has come

The clock has struck

Ages, since it’s hung about

Ten years hence

i haven't thought 

What my life is all about

 

Show the way

I pray to god

Where I want

To hang around

 

In the plane

I fly abroad

Or cozily stay

In my hometown

 

Choose a man

Or build a house

Which one first

I haven’t thought

 

All this time I wondered what,

What my birth was all about 

                                              - Ahena MK 

Reviews

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Great philosophy that I'm sure we all stumbled once in our lifetime. Wonderfully and rhythmically penned!

[Ahena MK]

glad you liked it ..
ahena :)

[Frieda P]

Oh you should as confuzzeled as moi....all good questions, what on earth?

Just a suggestion, 'the clock has struck'.

Good one Ahena. ;-)

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!!

[Frieda P]

My pleasure!!

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

we are all undecided nost of the time...good thoughts behind this

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!!
ahena :)

[Rida Sarwar]

deep! and really nicely penned ;)

[Ahena MK]

thanks ... :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Decisions that plague us all, Ahena; and once you've chosen one course, another possibility shows itself... Ah, the richness of Life! Well done in sentiment.

*(is "tuck" a typo?)

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for reading and ya tuck is on purpose to show time has gone...

[Odysseus Wanders]

Hey Ahena, is this line, "The clock has tuck" supposed to read, " The clock has stuck", just curious, you know, sometimes I miss the weirdest things in my writes... anyways, that caught my eye... but if it is supposed to be tuck, cool.
So great poem asking a great questions... big question, head on... you name it so directly, and yet there are tones that reach further than either husband or house... When you say "in the plane i fly abroad", to me it feels like you are flying around in the air of this monumental question your looking at. Your writing describes this well. Good to read. I think on these same questions as you... and for me, which i choose wont matter, as long as i honor my own path and truth first... and if i dont do that, then choosing one over the other becomes meaningless.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for reading ...... And I did the tuck thing intentionally.... Glad you felt it...
Ahena

[Vidya Bacchus]

I guess we all wonder sometimes what our real purpose in this life is? Are we doing what we are supposed to or are we falling short.This is well penned Ahena:)

[Ahena MK]

Thank you ......

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:)

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

first of all i read it, and i like it. And some "reviewers" can be grammar nazi's I think this is a well written piece, and it may be some of the things in here that would seemingly be grammatical errors, to add to the content. It may seem so in this case. I think personally, whether you fixed them or not, it wouldn't take away from the feeling you conveyed in this piece, nor would it take away from the rhythm and flow. If you didn't intend to make them and you need help. Inbox me. It's allot better to work one on one with someone on their work then just have them bashed on a review. I am still giving this a 100/100 because its cleverness and depth and the emotional sense of unknowing is conveyed well. Thanks for sharing

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the wonderful review .... And all the mistakes are on purpose to deliver a meaning :)
read moreThanks for the wonderful review .... And all the mistakes are on purpose to deliver a meaning :)
Ahena

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

i thought so, thats why I said those grammar nazi's below could just stuff it lol

[Ahena MK]

Ya poetry can have mistakes made on purpose to bring out a much deeper meaning ..... Thanks for the review ...
Ahena

[writ rajat]

This is the greatest ever greatest poem i read in my life
what's the wonderful thought,
which tell me what my life is all about,
thanks you for sending me read request you don't know what the obligation you done in my life

[Ahena MK]

thank you soooooo much for the wonderful review !!!!!!!
ahena :)

[writ rajat]

you are welcome