land of emotions

"destination prevails"

      Land of emotions

I travel through the waves of the ocean  

To  enter a land of great emotions               

As I watch the sun taking a dip       

And come back up for another trip      

As l travel through the waves of the ocean      

I watch the sky and mighty ocean                

The waves lift me up as the sky dips down  

the beauty and the sound  

makes me dance about

In my tiny ship I travel across lands    

crossing borders, through large rivers                        

to the land of great emotions                                                    

I sail across the oceans

Up above in the sky, l watch the sun shine                                

as days flow by                                                        

I sailed the great oceans      

and reached the land of emotions.

                                     -   Ahena MK  

Author's Note

what's your land of emotions?

Reviews

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

I would have liked more description...

[Ahena MK]

that would be good ....
thanks for reading :)

[Richard Layne]

I like the repetition here. Hives me the sense of floating on the ocean. Nice rhythm .

[Ahena MK]

thank you ...

[Gleb Zavlanov]

You certainly have reached the land of emotions in this piece. This is a fine and beautiful poem, and full of passion, calming imagery, and a lot of emotion. Very well done!

[Ahena MK]

thank you :)

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

i love the description in this piece, you make me feel like i was there and the structure is very sound. Great job.

[Ahena MK]

thank you
ahena

[Sue Hart]

Okay, these are all exceptional. Make a book of them and post them under your name and titled. Other sites will love them too. Check out groups, live feed and see offers.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the suggestion I'll look into it and thanks for reading

[writ rajat]

I think this poem need no promotion,
because it is already a land of emotion,
i think this is very nice,
because my name is writ

[Ahena MK]

ok.... thanks for the poematic review
ahena

[writ rajat]

you are welcome

[Tam Warink]

A very nice, flowing poem with popular imagery, Ahena. A few small issues... such as "I watch the sky’s " - the contraction indication the sky 'owns' or possesses something - but if so, then what is unclear. Here, "...as the sky dip down" would normally write "dips."

100 winsome waves

[Ahena MK]

thanks for the info... ill change it.
ahena

[Saddam]

In my tiny ship I travel across lands
crossing borders, through large
rivers
to the land of great emotions.
I love it...I love it.....now I will too search my land of emotion.

[Ahena MK]

thank you sooo much for reading
ahena