What I see right in front of me

Chains dragging feet onward

Toward inevitable fate, spinning

Legitimacy out of false answerers,

Never coming to find peace, or worse

Never having seeked it.

Author's Note

Potential new titles, or how this poem comes across are some things I have interest in.

Reviews

[Amy R]

Very deep poem, represents the struggle/burden of carrying chains of false answers and illusions, leading to a lack of peace and fulfillment.
I like how it allows us as readers to reflect on our own beliefs/choices in search of genuine peace and contentment.

Some potential titles,- Illusion of Freedom, Unending Battles?
Nice write.
-Amy

[Thomas W Case]

We are both from Iowa. What a coincidence. You key in on the human struggles. Great work.

[iTryToWriteAllTheTime]

Certainly is quite the pleasant coincidence. Thank you.

[JayG]

Umm..."seeked"? It's a word that doesn't exist in English. It's sought.

That aside, when you say, "Chains dragging feet onward" you're in uncharted territory, in that chains, are normally associated with acting to slow progress. I see what you're doing, but if the result is "Legitimacy out of false answerers," (whatever that is) why must they be dragged?

Maybe it's me, but, as I mentioned before, it seems that you're more trying to be obtuse and deep than express a thought.... Or, the necessary parts of the thought never made it to the page. Either way...

Sorry, but you did ask.

[Papaya]

I'm horrible at titles but I can feel the speaker trudging along and the title suggests purpose.
I think it's a good piece of brevity.