The Sun and Moon

Oh dearest beloved, can't thou see'th,

Our conversations are like lost seraph,

That thou and I are like the sun and moon,

Rarely meeting, but soon eclipsing in tune;

Each passing smile, each gazing firm eyes,

I find myself pondering on the whys...

Why is it hard to approach such beauty?

Death I say would be an easier duty!

The day grows shorter, I grow impatient,

Only thine smile can cure such a patient.

I wait in toil, as I watch from afar,

wondering of when we will be on par.

Just as how the sun sheds light to the moon,

The moon shines back, as a steady harpoon.

Author's Note

I wrote this as a child, so expect waft smell of cheese.
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Reviews

[calcutta clouds]

very pretty, the words sound out well.

[mou]

"That thou and I are like the sun and moon,
Rarely meeting, but soon eclipsing in tune;"--------It's lovely
And perhaps for the above question, I feel the answer will be as your feelings are strong then no need to be around all the time..
I really like the way you portrait the feeling here...
A beautiful write!

[Sami Khalil]

A good write with a good rhyming scheme. Very enjoyable...:)......

[PhDang]

Thank you very much. I am glad that you liked it. I will write more when I can.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...:)))))

[Shy_muse]

I LOVE this. This poem is excellent even for an adult, let alone a child. Wonderful work, I am so happy I got to read this. Thank you for sharing < 3

[PhDang]

My writing process at the time was sitting in front of the "rhyming hippo" website trying to look for rhyming words because my vocabulary was inept at the time. I believe "see'th" is a made up word altogether, which I tried making it sound fancy by choosing "Shakespeare's era" because... well it was fancy to me, so why not. x)

[Shy_muse]

How old were you when you wrote this??

[PhDang]

I believe 15 years of age? I just need an idea to work with and it will allow me to write something decent, but most of the time it's trial and error. The topic was "Sun and Moon" and I thought about what a great pairing that would be, so I reasoned a love poem.
The embarrassing thing was, I submitted this sophomoric poem back as a senior in high school and it got published. I have to go find that anthology book again because it had a lot of great poems written by other students as well, including 2 of my friend's poem. He's the real poet. Thanks again for the review.