The rest of Forever

Just a silly love poem I made, hope you like.

A dove,

caged to the lies,

 

leaving our imagination,

to free it.

Our love,

goes so high,

leaving every being,

to need it.

We sore through what evers left,

leaving nothing behind,

no regrets.

We face the mirror,

on the wall,

seeing what we see,

able to stand tall.

We go through our lives,

able to live ,

just for you.

We know,

it wont always be right,

but we die,

putting up a fight.

And I know,

nothing will always be the same,

but we stand here today,

so let forever come,

and take us away.

Because  I'll fly through the wind,

through the sea,

through the earth,

through the galaxy,

just to spend,

the rest of forever with you.

And I know,

it will come to an end,

so let it end when it ends,

but untill then, 

just spend,

the rest of forever with me.

 

Author's Note

Sorry I suck. Please give me any advice you can!

Reviews

[Love Hurts Even In Deat..]

Thank you sooooo much for the awesome advice and comments! Now I think I have the right to stay on this cafe thanks to you all!!

[Nicole]

You don't suck! This was very good! Just a few notes on style and grammer, in poetry you should always start a new line with a capital, even if it isn't the beginning of the sentence. But your content is very good. Keep it up! :)

[Starcaller]

No! You don't suck...that was very beautiful :)

[eatmills]

If you suck then I should not even be on this site. lol. It is beautiful and flows lightly on ones tongue.

Now for the edit, I do this free of charge;) We sore through what evers left. This should be We soar through whatever is left.
Just an aesthetic thought, you should space it off after each sentence (after each period). Hint you have to really review it when you copy/paste. WC is just like that.

[Drowning with Stars]

I personally find it easier to write sad poems, so I'm always impressed when I find a good poem based on good feelings. I like this, good job :)

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully optimistic write