Cloud

Cloud vanishing.

Cloud

 

Some doors must close

in order that others may open

as fragmental moments of my life

are left behind

so as to keep abandoned

cold empty spaces aglow.

 

A cloud dissipates

into the aether

never to cry again …

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh no .... you aren't saying goodbye are you? i think your use of "cloud" is smart, emotive and very relatable..your closing is so serene and sad ... not a common combination says i! wishing you well Aethereal!
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[CBH]

I love the diction in this piece. It really brings true emotion to your work. It flows so well, just like a cloud in the atmosphere! Loved this piece.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes, past memories do seem to like vanishing clouds. I bet they are glad to be free! Lovely poem.

[Perkele.7885]

I very much like the idea of abandoned cold empty spaces. If I have read you correctly, you are now de-fragmented, aglow and ready to go. Perhaps, I need some de-fragmentation, myself? A nifty poem!

[BL]

You have made the beauty of nature seem more surreal than the metaphors you are using. A door opening is like a cloud forming and a door closing id a cloud evaporating, this poem has very good construction and levels of meaning.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Every thing and everyone has its purpose on Earth… small or big, everything s of equal importance.

[Jon Roggie]

Nicely done. Moving from the past, at least those grown dim.

[icelandicblue]

This is just filled with emotion. It really is beautiful and touching.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is probably my favourite of yours I have ever read. What a strong piece, so succinct, and beautiful.

[Bright Ocean Star]

i agree with Anahat...last 3 lines are fantastic.