Mountain Escapade

A love poem inspired by the poem "Someday" written by Pure Innocence.

Mountain Escapade

 

I’m your love.

Don’t be coy…

 

Down the mountain,

faster, faster,

wheels are spinning

round and round.

 

I’m your girl.

You’re my boy…

 

Like a fountain

of disaster

rain is pouring

sky to ground.

 

We hold hands.

Oh, what joy…

Reviews

[Stephen]

Lol .. again you make me chuckle, Sweety. Your stuffs`re pretty childish... isn`t it? Anyway, but I enjoyed reading it ...there`s one more writer, I`ve got, over this site ..he too writes poems for children with the proper functioning of rhymes as same as you do .. Lovely-poem. Well written!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Stephen! It might have a childish theme, but it has a complex meter and rhyme scheme. My latest poem "Apples..." is more complex it that it has multilateral meaning, and extended ten syllable meter.

[Linda alexander]

A very nice lovely and inspirational poem, really enjoyed

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Linda! The mountains are lovely this time of year, but Autumn is best.

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a rhythmic, scenic journey down the mountain of love...like the one johnny rivers sang about.

it's good to get inspired...some don't seem to realize how much inspiration we can get reading others' poetry.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for reviewing my tiny song-poem, jacob! Most of us have been caught in the rain with someone whom we love. I wonder if you'll figure out who inspired my latest poem "Apple Paradise Lost" which is written in an old fashion style.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the energy and happiness in the poem. The poem create vision of two people enjoying their time together and having fun. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Coyote! I bet that you've traveled many mountain roads with your friends.

[Coyote Poetry]

I was a free-climber. I climbed every mountain I could get to. Good to find places. Few had touched. You are welcome.

[wordman]

because your my girl and I`m your boy

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, wordman! It didn't take you very long to respond to this poem. You never forget those times when you're caught in a rain storm with someone you care for. This happened to me once while on vacation up in Smokey Mountains.

[wordman]

Smokey mountains is in my back yard I was writing a poem and looked on feed and saw you post

[Aethereal]

I know; you live in one of the most beautiful places on Earth.

[wordman]

battlefield of Chickamauga and Chattanooga south of me battlefield of lookout mtn east and blueridge mountain and great smokey mtn west Atlanta ga 135 miles south Nashville 140 miles west

[Aethereal]

I've been there near that cannon above the clouds. People go there from all over the world.