Mountain Escapade

A love poem inspired by the poem "Someday" written by Pure Innocence.

Mountain Escapade

 

I’m your love.

Don’t be coy…

 

Down the mountain,

faster, faster,

wheels are spinning

round and round.

 

I’m your girl.

You’re my boy…

 

Like a fountain

of disaster

rain is pouring

sky to ground.

 

We hold hands.

Oh, what joy…

Reviews

[Jon Roggie]

Nice write. The last two lines bring a smile.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Jon!

[Rene Salinas]

Big nice smile on this Aethereal I like the bit were he reassures her and then she does the same for him that seems a clever way ti imply totality of union and then of course issues are thrown into the mix but it's al right as they are together.

Heart warming stuff.

Thankyou

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Rene! Doves embrace all the tighter as gray clouds roll by through an angry sky.

[Aethereal]

It's great to see a romantic piece from you my friend. Again with so much love for nature, and universal aspects in it, and loved the cadance of this one... I always enjoy anything you write!!

- Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Elisa! Snow and rain storms draw us all closer to the comforting fire of our affections.

And there, a pen, ink, and your words, do dance, on paper... I imagine that fireplace, and you my friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

Like a fountain
of disaster
rain is pouring
sky to ground.

A whole new meaning to falling in love. Great rhythm with this piece:)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for our review, Pryde! Inspired by all of my adventures while vacationing in Smoky Mountains.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Simply put to words...
made that way was your intent with these lines...
so it seems...I presume...
As I read this jiffy type of a write...

[Matching Socks]

This is a sweet love poem.
It could be jack and jill as the young lovers climbing up the mountain.
Really enjoyed it. :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Ance! Affection is more intense when mixed with adventure and spiced with danger. Every three years loves should go on a jungle safari, swim with the sharks, wrestle with a bear, or climb a mountain.

[Matching Socks]

I agree! ....

[Shaquana Adams]

This is cute ^-^ I like the simplicity of it. Nicely penned.
-QuanaWana

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Shaquana! Occam's razor works everytime.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Awesomesauce… what a fun and sweet poem.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why you are welcome.

[Dhaye]

This is sweet and cool. I can imagine two teenagers...
I enjoyed this one.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Dhaye! If you have ever driven through a rain storm with someone whom you care for, then I sure that you would know how that inner calm that you feel by being with someone else under these circumstances is magnified.

[Dhaye]

How do you know that? While some people are afraid to get wet, I always wanted to walk in the rain with my love one.
You're welcome.

[Aethereal]

Either way, the rainstorms drive cooing love doves closer together in their nesting tree.

[Dhaye]

You always speak with metaphor that sometimes I find it hard to understand because I'm just a simple writer. But perhaps in due time I will understand those things.

[Aethereal]

Without this storm there would be no contrast between order and chaos. One is more clearly defined by the other. A flicker of light becomes everything in the darkness; in the glare of sunlight it has no relevance. A drop of water falling on a parched desert is paradise to a struggling flower. Without contrast we wouldn’t notice anything.