May's Sway

How the month of May changes two lover's moods. In this poem no word is more than five letters.

May’s Sway

 

When I watch the dew

in the month of May

tears of joy ensue

at the break of day.

 

When my skies turn blue

from an inky gray,

and we join as two,

we touch every ray.

 

When gales start to brew,

and rains soak the quay

don’t give in to rue.

This shall pass away.

 

When a bow’s in view

far above the bay

we hug every hue;

our love’s here to stay.

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Oh I will not get tired of smiling at the end of your writings becuase th ability to be precise and concise and to capture a theme well not an easy thing. And at every paragraph There is a condensed thought which let's us know where , how , when and more questions just by depictions based on those decriptions but that is not all the moment where (and there aren't many lines) the descriptions turn inwards and create the value of unity well that moment is precious.

Thankyou

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Rene! That's right, I focus my verses like burning rays. Also notice that each rhyming end word is a perfect rhyme that's only used once throughout my entire poem. How many other poets do you know who can do that and still keep in meter? Although I've never written any books of poetry, it seems to me that I'm one in seven billion.

[Rene Salinas]

I keep banging on about that it is rare God knows I 've sat down for hours trying to make it all be condenssed like a tesseract and yet I end up giving up and creating all kinds of werid shapes to justify my incapability so I although know is not me have a great del of respect for what you present.

[Aethereal]

Many years ago in college I used to write computer programs for my Math, Engineering and Science classes that no one thought possible. They wanted me to teach computer programming at the college before I graduated, but I had better things to do. Writing poems is much more fun.

[Pryde Foltz]

A really wonderful piece … a sunny day by the Bay:)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Love it.

such Beautiful swaying words.

Thank you for sharing this Amazing piece.

Blessings. Kindred poet

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, KindredPoet!

Poet's words shall sway
at the break of day.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome. it's my pleasure. Blessings. Kindred poet

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words in the poem. I like the flow of thoughts and the perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Coyote! I know how you like Nature poems.

[Coyote Poetry]

I do and you are welcome.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Reminds me of Robert Frost's brilliant poetry… a bloody outstanding write.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review R&R Cowboy! Robert Frost was one of the best.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes he most certainly was. You are welcome.

[Sunny Lotus Eyes]

Normally I prefer this rhyme scheme as it seems the easiest. Good choice of words.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Sunny! The five syllable metered style is the easiest of all. The longer the line, the more difficult it is to hold to a proper meter. You must remember that free verse in most cases should have some kind of metered rhythm too. Not all songs rhyme.

[Sunny Lotus Eyes]

:)) Thanks for sharing these knowledge with me. I'm a debutante and learnt a lot from you. Keep it up!

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Dear friend
Thank you for this entry to the contest. I'm impartial, of course, at this stage.
Personally I like this a lot.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review! I'm happy that you like it. It's a song-poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not quite my taste, but you do a good job with the rhyme and the five letter words.

I find this style sounds a bit forced, but i know it appeals to many---and so for its style, it works.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, jacob! A 1/0/1/0/1 meter five syllable poems where 1 = accent; 0 = non-accent, and no exact rhyme word is use more than once in the poem where only two rhyme sounds are used might seem a bit forced or impossible to some, but I did it for a contest.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like i said, you did the form well...just not my style...but that is just a taste thing.

[Aethereal]

I understand. You do your signature style of poetry just as well, and I've learned to enjoy it. In fact, I'd buy a book filled with your style of poetry if you'd ever publish one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i actually have...they are available on amazon, barnes and noble and goodreads.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, I'll take a look. It would be good to have them all in one place. Perhaps I'll find the keys to the universe in one or more of them. Your enigmatic poems are food for thought and contemplation. My poems don’t have as deep an undertow.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Intersection Blues" is the newest...but you'll see...appreciate the interest.

jacob

[Aethereal]

I've made a note of that. I always suspected that your poems were of publishing quality because try as hard as I could, I could never find any errors, and all of your concepts tugged on my mind as new found innovations. Poetry should be innovative, in the way that a television set would be innovative to a troglodyte from 50,000 B.C. Make me feel like a troglodyte being surprised by future events.