She

A girl as twilight

She

 

When she comes to me

under twilight skies

with her wine dark sea

deep enchanting eyes,

 

then we cease to be

held to worldly ties

as reality

begs the moon to rise.

 

Men may not foresee

how she nullifies

every fantasy

that preoccupies

 

pen and ink that's free

to idealize

to the nth degree

moods that they surmise.

Reviews

[Tan-90]

The twilight hour, a period of many possibilities. Between the approaching darkness and the surreal pastel shades in the sky, one is truly left quite vulnerable to let wonder, desire and temptation in to their mind, .."She". "She" not a mere person but the regret, the pain, the excitement, the loss, the overwhelming sensation of love, fear or remorse that we camouflage so well in the bright sun light, that peaks in these fragile hours.

We are both inspired and bewildered by the euphoria of the hour, an "awakening", a realisation a spiritual moment.. that we let her in.. wondering all the what ifs, missed opportunities, past mistakes, lost lovers, lost connections.. letting your imagination go wild.."we cease to beheld to worldly ties"

And sometimes in our weakest of moments, we let her "nullify" us, we act on these feelings, our impulses throwing caution to the wind and risk the crumbling of the usual familiar, they system that works.. call your lost love and say that you still love him, buy the biggest bouquet of flowers for your wife..drive over to your mothers house to give her the longest hug, or tell your high school nemisis that you have forgiven him..

Some of us turn to silent words etched on paper with a heavy hearted pen, that result in beautiful pieces of work on Writes Cafe :)

Thank you for sharing your gift with us. I was so inspired. Beautifully written.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for this wonderfully detailed review, Tan-90! Books could be written about that mysterious ancient mood that comes upon us at closing hour of the day.

[Tan-90]

So true. If a day was a month, the twilight will be it's full moon. And on that hour we all give in to lunacy or our basic instincts..

[Aethereal]

It’s a mood that’s a prelude of those dreams that pull us into the nocturnal abyss of our subconscious minds.

[Tan-90]

Precisely..So beautifully said...

[Pure Innocence]

This was beautifully written! I loved the flow and whole meaning of this poem. I love your last stanza:

"pen and ink that's free
to idealize
to the nth degree
moods that they surmise."

Just the idea of what we can do with a piece of pen and paper is enchanting and I am kinda of a math person so I like that you used the nth degree idea. :) Anyways I really liked this piece. Thank you for sharing your poems.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Pure Innocence! Yes, pen and paper is a cornucopia of joy.

[Pure Innocence]

It most definitely is... that's why we are all here :)

[Tom]

'Carried away on a moonbeam' !

A captivating poem, the creative rhyme scheme adds intensely to the ardor and fervent desire relayed throughout !

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Tom! My rhyme scheme is just Classical poetry on steroids. The moon has always been a powerful poetic symbol.

[James Walpole]

Loved the rhythm of the piece and its message of creativity enclosed from the world.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, James! I like the term "creative enclosure".

[James Walpole]

No worries :)

[La Luna]

I love how the poem does not lose its flow as ends, a great memorable poem, well done :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Luna! Every river must flow into the sea. Every poem must flow into a conclusion unless it's an epic.

[La Luna]

Hahaha good comparison :) but you're welcome, and of course it must.

[NeiL ArandA]

I'm here Aethereal ... I enojoyed reading and soaking this beautiful piece of yours.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Neil! So you're acquainted with graceful Lady Twilight too?

[NeiL ArandA]

Not quite my friend but I feel the romantic side of you here ... I'm still in deep limbo about the rooster and a chick ... Perhaps someday I will figure that out . :)

[Ana B.]

Woah, really loved it, so simple and yet so perfect....very romantic!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Ana B.! Yes, romantic!

[Sami Khalil]

A gorgeous write with wonderful imagery and mood setting skills. Glad I have visited...:)........................

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Sami! I'm glad that this poem put you in the mood.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)..............

[stars are far]

That was well done ,you did a good job here

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, stars are far! Glad you enjoyed it.