She

A girl as twilight

She

 

When she comes to me

under twilight skies

with her wine dark sea

deep enchanting eyes,

 

then we cease to be

held to worldly ties

as reality

begs the moon to rise.

 

Men may not foresee

how she nullifies

every fantasy

that preoccupies

 

pen and ink that's free

to idealize

to the nth degree

moods that they surmise.

Reviews

[Tan-90]

The twilight hour, a period of many possibilities. Between the approaching darkness and the surreal pastel shades in the sky, one is truly left quite vulnerable to let wonder, desire and temptation in to their mind, .."She". "She" not a mere person but the regret, the pain, the excitement, the loss, the overwhelming sensation of love, fear or remorse that we camouflage so well in the bright sun light, that peaks in these fragile hours.

We are both inspired and bewildered by the euphoria of the hour, an "awakening", a realisation a spiritual moment.. that we let her in.. wondering all the what ifs, missed opportunities, past mistakes, lost lovers, lost connections.. letting your imagination go wild.."we cease to beheld to worldly ties"

And sometimes in our weakest of moments, we let her "nullify" us, we act on these feelings, our impulses throwing caution to the wind and risk the crumbling of the usual familiar, they system that works.. call your lost love and say that you still love him, buy the biggest bouquet of flowers for your wife..drive over to your mothers house to give her the longest hug, or tell your high school nemisis that you have forgiven him..

Some of us turn to silent words etched on paper with a heavy hearted pen, that result in beautiful pieces of work on Writes Cafe :)

Thank you for sharing your gift with us. I was so inspired. Beautifully written.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for this wonderfully detailed review, Tan-90! Books could be written about that mysterious ancient mood that comes upon us at closing hour of the day.

[Tan-90]

So true. If a day was a month, the twilight will be it's full moon. And on that hour we all give in to lunacy or our basic instincts..

[Aethereal]

It’s a mood that’s a prelude of those dreams that pull us into the nocturnal abyss of our subconscious minds.

[Tan-90]

Precisely..So beautifully said...

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Poetic and passionate, this flows quite smoothly and melts the heart with emotion.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, SquinklaPsyOps!
Holding hands with Day and Night,
every Twilight brings insight.

[Troy Henson]

This piece spoke volumes to me. You write as if you have been writing forever. This was a strong piece that delivered a somewhat romantic story. Truly inspiring work.

Regards
Troy

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Troy! It's always possible that I’ve written poetry in all of my previous incarnated lives, and shall do so forever-and-ever in worlds without end.

[Lydia Shutter]

This rocks with sensuality and desire. Delicious personification that is so very romantic. The metaphor is stunning and the rhyming is mesmerizing. What a winner this poem is! Lydi**

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Lydia!

[A. Amos]

Strong and elegantly crafted, you my friend are truly God gifted artist...as your words speaks to your readers. Epic!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, A. Amos! All events flow from a mysterious cornucopia of innovation or source to a destination or sink. Personify this (source) cornucopia as a god if you wish, and each innovation as a gift if you like, but it's all the same under any other name, a deep mystery generating history. I’m fond of mysteries. We’re the source of assigned Personifications because we wish to be loved by beings such as ourselves be they dolls, pets, stuffed bears, or gods. At the present time, we’re trying to make our computers as human as possible through artificial intelligence. I understand human nature.

[A. Amos]

So do I and I agree with you, you're most welcome

[Matching Socks]

Very well done.
Enjoyed this one.
:)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Ance!

[ShahW1]

I read this a few times and it meant different things to me each time. Always a great sign of a universal connection, and of a talent to tap into the human psyche. Loved it.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, ShanW1! Those who are in touch with their own psyche are also in touch with a universal psyche that has no limit in its ability to define possible realities.

[Stephen]

Nice poem, yeah, here you well express the beauty of twilight blending the taste of yours with words. Nice one .. but here I`d like to know ..what`s "nth degree" .. Mind if may I ask?

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Stephen! Taking something to the nth degree is a mathematical term that means to consider every possible permutation as a part of your perception. In short, it means to consider every possible point-of-view. It may also means to take a function to its limit, or limits. A poem could be written about the nth degree all by itself, or even a book.

[Stephen]

Your welcome, Sweety. Hey.. what you said? Mathematical term? eh .. Holy crap! I hate freaking maths .. and believe me whatever you explained here is not getting in my mind .. but yeah .. "Functions to its limit??" Uumm.. sounds good.. I can take it as a "limits of words" or the strength of lines....am I right?

[Aethereal]

Just take it all the way to the core-of-your being, the apple core. Mathematics is just another language that we use to decipher the nature of reality.

[Stephen]

Okay ...yeah, I got it ..I got it now. But why you praising Mathematics so much .. I know, writers can never be loved of maths then why you so? Anyway, I think, you love maths much which`s why you blending "Theorems, Sums and of course, permutations and combinations" into the words .. like stirring the taste of yours making the poem beautiful at all .. but yeah, sounds very good, I must, you`ve got much knacks so, I really do appreciated your talent.

[Aethereal]

I am a mathematician. The writer who wrote "Alice in Wonderland" was also a mathematician. For some reason I haven’t been able to add you as a friend yet. I think that we both sent a request out at the same time, and the silly computer server got confused. I’ll keep trying.

[Stephen]

Holy--Crap! Are you kidding me?? Your a Mathematician?? S**t! I truly can`t believe .. but if you say then I gotta believe .. hope you won`t teach me "Maths" (which I freaking hate the most) through your beautiful stuffs. Oh ... well, Sweety .. I`ve bunches of friends-requests .. and when i`d have time, i`ll scroll down and accept your F.R ... it might take much time finding your f.r from the bunches of ones .. so, i`ll check it out later on.. Howsoever, Sweety, I never send f.r`s to anyone so which`s meant that you`d have send me a request and it`d be in a pending list .. don`t get confused ..and don`t say .. your computer`s silly..it`s quiet nice even .. it helping you making some conversations with me and posing your new stuffs so that the readers could read your new posts .. so, salute your beautiful computer.. by the way, me too salute my P.C as well.

[Aethereal]

Whatever! I don't know how you get by without a knowledge of mathematics. I'm gussing that you're like the flowers; "Look at the flowers in the field, for they do not want."

[Stephen]

Lol ..You make me chuckle, Sweety. Well .. If I truly say then yeah .. Maths play a very vital role in our lives even you know what? The whole universe`s all based on mathematics .. INDEED. The balance of life, time .. the fluctuations of moments and blah ..blah ..blah .. everything`s all up to maths .. even though ...our mind which`s beautiful gift of god work the way like maths ... What all I`m saying that I just freaking hate maths because it makes me feel .. like *Y-A-W-N* ...Boring .... and I really find calculations, formulas, numericals .. hard to solve .. if mention that your mathematician .. Umm.. I don`t like Mathematician ..to be honest ..but Sweety .. the way you talk and easily make me feel understand all the things is what I like about you.. because I don`d find mathematician very good in nature ..they are so rude and tough guys .. but anyway, your a ... nice mathematician ...I like you .. and hope to learn some more "Nth DEGREES" stuffs so that I could learn some thing IN MATHEMATICIAN field as well.

[Aethereal]

All through your life, your brain will keep growing new neurological pathways depending on whether or not you use your brain for this or that. A typist doesn’t type a hundred words per minute on the first try because her brain needs to catch up. The more you do something the better you get at it. Being a guy, I hope that you understand which brain I’m talking about. Either you use it or lose it. Mathematics is brain therapy.

[Stephen]

Now .. you showing me a Mathematician face .. yeah..your right ..the more we do, we better we get..even you know what? Sometimes, the life brings many opportunities what we ignore through the life and may be, which bring the reason of our lack of knowledge and understandings .. yeah, a typewriter can never writer 100 words in a minute at first ...but he can ... if he applies the "F-O-R-M-U-L-A" .."The more we do, the better we get" ..isn`t it? I`m now wonder .. what makes you a great writer .. because your mind`s totally got stuck in maths and am really ,...really very surprised to see that you write stuffs even you`ve got a passion or talent in literature .. Ah! freaking crazy! but glad .. to know there`s many talented writer, no matter whether they are mathematicians or .. reader, writer and blah..blah..blah ... whatever.

[Aethereal]

All of my poems possess meter, and that is within the domain of mathematics. Just because a poem is free verse is no excuse not to use meter to give it flow and rhythm. Mathematics is much more than it seems to most. Have you ever heard of Fuzzy Logic, Group Theory, Real Analysis, Evolution Algorithms, Probability Theory. Gödel’s Incompleteness Theorem, or Differentiable Manifolds? Mathematics is as open ended as any other language. Lewis Carroll the author of “Alice through the Looking Glass” was a mathematician. Mathematics is woven all through this work of literature.

[Stephen]

Now what`s that. .... Meter??? I hope you ain`t talking of "Thermometer" .. are you?? I never read about this before ... what`s it? .. Umm..well, yeah few terms, i've heard like ...Real analysis, Algorithms, Probability, differentiability and am not sure, i`ve read about group theory or not ... lol And, yeah .. Mathematics is an other lang.. but the science and arts are too ..Isn`t it??

[Aethereal]

Classical poetry is based on meter. Meter is the order in which the accents and non-accents are organized on a line of poetry. A line of poetry that has five syllables may be organized as 1/0/1/0/1 where 1 = an accent; 0 = a non-accent. It may also organized in as 0/1/0/1/0 or any other combination, but the same order is followed for every line in the poem. Count the syllables on each line of one of my poems and notice where my accents fall. This gives my lines of poetry rhythm and flow. Meter makes a poem sing.

[Stephen]

Now you making me more attentive here, Sweety .. May be, i`m learning something new from you .. you are a mathematician (as you mentioned) and I hate learning anything from `em cus, they always talk about maths ..formulas and again maths but your different .. you are changing my perception about mathematicians indeed texting such kind of intellectual words .. well, yeah .. I really didn`t know about meters but yeah, may be, now am getting it .. can you suggest me you few poems to read which are written in such kinda meters so that I could learn how to write such sorta poems too??

[Aethereal]

My latest poem "Apples Paradise Lost" has a 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1 ten syllable meter where 0 = a non-accent; 1 = an accent. Look in the dictionary to find were accents are within a word if you're not sure. Most of my poems will do. Go to the very first one I wrote if you want to. There is also a lot of information on the mechanics of poetry on the NET. Amazon has some books on the subject. If you wish to make money writing poems, you'll need to write song-poems, and song poems require meter if they are to sing. If you wish to make money writing short stories, then you must know how to turn them into movie scripts because movies is where all the money is. Songs and movies = cash!

[Stephen]

Sweety, you are now making me just .. just blinding on you .. your talent. I never thought that a mathematician can be so intelligent .. that`s pretty weird to hear but it`s truth so, I admire you! Well..yeah ...I hope here "Accent" Means "Pronunciation" ..Am I right?? I`m now getting understand your "Meters' .. I don`t write using such kinda things ... I just write and write without using meters at all indeed but you giving me a new way looking across the new talent and I adore this one ... from the heart. Umm ... Money? Sounds interesting! I`ve many songs and poems which`s yet not over this site but in my folders .. and yeah, once i`d thought about earning some money online through my writings but then I couldn`t understand how to earn online and what kinda things I gotta do ....So, I just let it go .. but as you talk about movie scripts ..that sounds very cool .. I`ve written one play and that`s over this site called "Dancing all night" .. that`s may be not that cool but yeah .. it`s cool. I`d be honored if I could earn some money through my writings .. what should I do?? Have you ever earned some money online??

[Aethereal]

All you need to do is write the songs, have an album made, then advertise on the net (Amazon) to sell your album. For short stories, all you need to do is write them into short half hour or one hour movie scripts, have the movies produced on disks containing ten or so episodes, and then place your disks on Amazon for sale. It’s called Capitalism. Wealth is created.

[Stephen]

Oh ..I see .. it`s a very long--process. I thought, it`d be a short and I can do easily but Sweety .. to make a movie ..I`d needed much people and lights .. I know i`ve many scripts in my folders but to give a shot to each of them all .. It`d be needed money, time and of course, determination... anyway, thanks for the help. As of this moment, i`m just over here .. and to be here over this site`s an honor to me as well as making some skilled conversations with you`s all about what i`m so pleased. Thanks for taking some time making some conversations with me, I really enjoyed talking with you even I`d a great time with you ... i`d again love to talk with you someday...hey, i`d read your many stuffs one by one ... and you can read mine if you`d like to... i`m right now editing in my play "Dancing all night" .. i`d written a couple of days or weeks earlier ...and after that, if I get some time then yeah, i`ll be working on "Meters" .. I need to study it hard .. to write poems in "Meters" .. hope the internet`d help me out and if I`d need your help then yeah .. I`ll ask it ..hope you won`t mind if I ask for some help! And, yeah .. Mathematician is an other lang. or art, Sweety and you`ve proved it .. before meeting you, I`d totally different perception about mathematicians but now I can say .. all mathematicians are not rude .. some are very cute, sweet and very kind as same as you. So, stay kind, Sweety.

[Aethereal]

If your songs and movie scripts are good enough, a literary agent will find a wealthy producer for you. Just perfect your art. It's hard work! Take care!

[Stephen]

Yeah .. your absolutely right. Your far kind, Sweety. Oh by the way, Nice meeting you, I`m really honored to meet you ;)

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! "Your" is the possessive; "you're" is the contraction for you are. Mixing the two is the most common error on the Internet. Good night!

[Stephen]

Ha! You makin` me chuckle now, Sweety. I know very well ....about those things .. lol it`s just, I write, in the fast typing .. even it`s a shorter way to.. to ..... but I forgot I`m now talking with a great legend "Mathematician"...so, from now I should gotta be careful about "Possessives" & "Contractions". Your such ... I mean, "YOUR`RE" such a beautiful mathematician I`ve ever met .. Anyway, so , I can say to you, stay beautiful as well with your all kindness... And what more I should say is ....Umm ----. *Hugs* .. Sleep-Well, Sweety. Good-Night!

[Blue]

Really excellent portrayal of the depth of twilight's beauty. I commend the rhyme scheme and the structure. The stanza that got me was:

"then we cease to be
held to worldly ties
as reality
begs the moon to rise."

Well done as always!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for our detailed review, Blue! Twilight sends us to the Moon.

[Dhaye]

No more words, Ae. I just like this poem. It's interesting and intriguing because it's from a man's POV. LOL.
As usual, excellent rhyme scheme.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Dhaye! I'm glad that you enjoyed Lady Twilight.

[Dhaye]

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