Island Paradise (Rondeau)

A Rondeau about an island paradise.

Island Paradise  (Rondeau)

 

Sing a sunny song for me

near the rocks beside the quay

underneath the cresting spray

where small crabs and turtles stray

as they craw up from the sea.

 

In the shade of a palm tree,

I’ll serve tea with poetry

where shy native children play.

Sing a sunny song.

 

May our island fantasy

be a paradise for thee

where you’re blessed by every ray

that the sun and moon display

as cool trade winds blow carefree.

Sing a sunny song.

Reviews

[WordlessFacade]

Beautiful poem! I can't wait wait to hear more. :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Tinderfox! Perhaps you may write your own island paradise poem.

[Honey-Bee]

Beautiful! I could feel the spray sitting near the beach and hear a sunny song under the sun and moon. Thanks for sharing!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your lovely review, Honey-Bee! That just what I wanted to do: Place my reader on Paradise Island.

[Kyle Lawrence]

My kind of paradise. Great poem :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Kyle! The way things are going, some day paradise will be paved over for a parking lot, all the flowers, all the trees, and the humble bumble bees.

[Tina Kline]

A very beautiful and fun sounding place.
Well done!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Tina! Yes, and it was fun to write too.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sounds like a real paradise, beautiful scenery, singing sunny songs and a life filled with poetry...

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, jacob! I feel sure that dolphins, chipmunks, gound moles, butterflies, and humble bumble bees would be there too.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes songs of paradise. We need to hear many in our life. I like the hope and energy in the beautiful poetry
for sunny and carefree days. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Coyote! I'd buy my own tropical island if I had a few million to spare.

[Coyote Poetry]

I would appreciate. I wouldn't do Hemingway. I would drink whiskey, read and write till it was my time to go.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice Rondeau about nature. But this is more than an island paradise, but a fantasy paradise where that lovers can stay. Lately, I realize how 'dreams' and 'love fantasy' were your usual themes (like in the Dolphin Love which is wishing for a dolphin to walk on land). Well, just my interpretation, Ae.
You are really brilliant. I admire you for writing profound pieces. Keep it up!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Daisie! Note that all the lines of this poem are in the same meter, and every rhyme word is only used once. There are only two rhyming sounds throughout this poem. All rhymes are exact. Also note that the word "quay" rhymes with both "me" and spray because it has two different pronunciations.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I know that "quay" is pronounced as "kee". And Rondeau really requires one meter for the longer lines (because the refrain is a short line taken from the first line). And only two since the rhyme scheme is "a and b only plus refrain". That's why you are really brilliant because you made a perfect Rondeau for the first time. LOL.

[Aethereal]

It also sings like a song.