Nature's Rage

Nature's Rage

A Poem by Aethereal
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Nature's rage during a Summer rain storm.

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Nature’s Rage

 

From my porch, I hear their small

tapping liquid feet.

Pitter patter, raindrops fall

fast and bittersweet.

 

Traffic screech’s to a crawl

on my flooded street

as a somber murky pall

merges with concrete.

 

Nature’s raging protocol

lifts the Summer’s heat

from embroiled urban sprawl

pounding it with sleet.

 

On this day, I watch them all

drowning in conceit

sinking under waves of gall

suffering defeat.

© 2014 Aethereal


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Awesomesauce, very nicely written… I love a good rain storm. It sloths the soul and clears the air of man made pollutants.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review! It clears the air only if it isn't acid rain made by toxic smokestack emissi.. read more
Nice. What is the meter you have used?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Sunny! I used overlapping meter where the top line is 1/0/1/0/1/0/1 seven sy.. read more
the way you wrote this poem is very descriptive. i practically could visualize the sound of raindrops and a the screeching of a cars tires during a major traffic jam. the way you wrote your poem made it easy to actually imagine the it all.i also like the simile used in this part.

Traffic screech’s to a crawl
on my flooded street
as a somber murky pall
merges with concrete.


Posted 10 Years Ago


Sunny Lotus Eyes

10 Years Ago

I personally prefer free verse but is it trochees that you prefer?
Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Just because free verse has no rhyme, in most cases, there’s no reason to think that it needs no m.. read more
Sunny Lotus Eyes

10 Years Ago

Thanks! Good job.:)
This poem is very nicely written. The used of description in your poem was done well. I could almost hear the sound of the rain, and screeching of the tires on a wet road during a traffic jam. I liked the way
you compared the somber gray stormclouds to the bitterness of defeat.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Stephanie M! Before I write a poem, I don't know how it will turn o.. read more
I love it! I especially like reading and writing poems of nature, as it has so much to offer the poet. The presentation, rhyme and imagery are superb! I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, WindSong! I love those Summer rain storms.
You are very good with rhyming scheme . It just comes natural for you this way. Perhaps you just did this piece in one sitting or one sunday evening or afternoon while watching the pelting rain ...
You have an amazing mind Aethereal ... I wish I could go inside and find out the secrets behind ...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Neil! I wrote this poem in half an hour. When I was in high school, I had en.. read more
NeiL ArandA

10 Years Ago

I won't be cruel ... You have a beautiful mind and the world is ignorant about it. You know people d.. read more
The image you used is beautiful and contrast with the scene described in the poem. I like that, it seems to drive home the point of the poem even greater. At night thing do take on a more sinister tone because there is the unknown, even though the night might be a beautiful one. There is still something foreboding that can usually conjure unspoken warnings. Intriguing poem :).

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Shirlena! Contrast is an important element in every poem for nothin.. read more
In the end we are all defeated by nature should she so choose ... great thoughts here. One question, is screech's poetically licensed, or should it be screeches?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, KLGoode! Screeches would be the plural of screech, and screech's is.. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

American, Canadian, potato, poTATO screeches or screech or screech's is the writer's prerogative.:)
Aethereal

10 Years Ago

This is true! Whatever form is used is understood by the context. This line of poetry produces many .. read more
Again your brilliance abounds.. the beautiful image of the rain falling to mimic a sorrowful soul... yet the gorgeous tumulting clouds, spilling liquescent sentiment...to mingle with the trodden streets..paint such an emotional picture that leaps in my soul. You have a beauty that resonates in your writing...Fantastic work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your lovely revoew, Kalypso! I tried to express my feelings on such a rainy day as this .. read more
I had such a thunderstorm here right now... and the images you create,
along with your perfect as ever rhyme scheme, are fantastic, you bring always something new,

through the strict verses... there is a story, a thing to catch... in between the lightnings.
Aw, gorgeous!!

- Elisa

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Elisa! A storm is approaching here tomorrow. I love watching them from my wi.. read more

10 Years Ago

Oh I hope not a too bad one my friend... stay safe and cozy inside. :) I love storms too, have a hug.. read more

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Added on April 21, 2014
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Tags: rage, nature, city, rain, sleet, storm, traffic, porch, Summer

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