Perfect Day

A little poem about a perfect day.

Perfect Day

 

Pirouetting honeybee

bend your little inky knee,

bow low to that cherry tree

on the first of May. Hey!

 

Spiders spinning fancy-free

webs that build a fantasy

catch a nit, a fly, a flea

who has gone astray. Hey!

 

Robins what do you foresee?

Do you have a guarantee

of worms, maybe two or three,

as you look for prey? Hey!

 

Puffy cloud move close to me.

Do you know to what degree

I’m part of your pedigree

on this perfect day? Hey!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

definitely good form here...and nice light fare for spring, which might have finally come here in southern illinois...it has been threatening to arrive, and then suddenly it's cold and dreary again.

a nice smile from this "honey" of a poem.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, jacob! More than any other time of year, we are aware of our relationship between ourselves and our little blue ball of joy, Earth.

[Aethereal]

As always you rock my dear friend in this highly structured bringing of a poem....
Thought out, felt, written.

We are all connected to each other, as worms, or Robins, as Spiders or bee's.
What we just need is balance, weather on a right season, and calm seas.

:)

Just a perfect day..... ♫
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QYEC4TZsy-Y He he smiling :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Elisa! Everything is connected to Mother Earth. You always rock too.

Gaia in us, is breathing, (out of us, is dealing, teaching us) how to look at the earth, her womb.....

many hugs! my friend -xx-

[Aethereal]

Good night! It's geting late. Bed time. Sweet dreams!

LOL same here, +7 hours hah! ;-) xxx and Easter relaxing Zzzzzz's. :) you too buddy Good dreams!

[MsJewel]

A sweet and uplifting poem - perfect for a spring day! Gorgeous writing!

:) Julie

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, MsJewel! As you can see, all of my poems are song poems using meter and exact rhyme.

[MsJewel]

I enjoy writing in meter and rhyme as well. Your poem is a sweet little song!

[Aethereal]

I'm looking forward to reading some of your rhymes.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem for the perfect day. I like the good description. Create vision of nature and a day to celebrate life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Coyote! Nature speak to us through her multifaceted touch. She’s a gem with many sparkling points of reference,

[Dhaye]

Hey, hey hey!
I love this piece like for a cheer, hey!
Smile at the sun, laugh with the wind, play
Life is full of surprises, come on, stay.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your poetic review, Dhaye! I love it.

[Dhaye]

Also motivated by your cheerful piece, Aethereal.
You're welcome.

[Aethereal]

If anyone wishes to write a rendition of any of my poems, they are welcome to do so.

[Shirlena]

Hey! I loved the rhythm and the rhyme of the piece and the content is priceless...it's not boring like a lot of poems I've read that have this type of count. It's fun and exhilarating...it made me dance and snap my fingers to the beat...made me happy.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Shirlena! If a poem must have a count, then it had better have a rhythm to it. Most of my poems start out as songs playing in my head.

[Raymond Federle]

Nicely done I enjoyed it greatly! Glad spring is here as well! :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Raymond! Have a happy Spring.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

What a sweet song in celebration of spring... May is a glorious month... full of flowering beauty that brings out my muse. I enjoyed this piece with all it's sing song spirit. Well done!

[Pryde Foltz]

A really wonderful spring write, Aethereal. You are quickly becoming one of my favourites.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Pryde!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Really great little poem. Love it. Immediately builds images in the mind. Nice.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review! I happy that you enjoyed it.