Devolution

The devolution of the human species.

Devolution

 

Many creatures need their trees
it must be understood.
Chipmunks, birds, and honeybees
would perish but for wood.

 

Chirp,

tweet,

buzz, buzz

pollen on the fuzz.

 

Mastering sky, land, and seas,
we ditched our trees for good.
Now we live like rats and fleas
as gangsters in the hood.

 

Rat-a-tat-tat-tat,

rat-a-tat-tat-tat

bang, bang,

boom!

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

A beautiful light hearted poem with a very serious message! There is a lot of rat-a-tat-tat-a-tat
going on in everyday living which Nature is finding hard to disperse.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Astri! We're wrecking our natural environment with all this rat-a-tat.

[Great Aunt Astri]

If poets 'la la la' in the best possible way perhaps we may be able to counter the rat-a-tat!

[Sami Khalil]

A fun and informative write written splendidly by a very talented poet...Bravo.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[richom]

Very well written and fun to read. Until recently I lived in a wooded area, observed the creatures you mentioned regularly, and greatly enjoyed the serenity of living among the trees. (Not too fond of the leaf raking, though.) Richard

[Aethereal]

Thanks for the inspiration behind this poem, Richard! If I don't rake my leaves, then the North Wind does it for me bunching them on one side of my lawn against my trees and shrubs.

[SyberRose]

The poor birds lose their homes as people do with floods and fire etc...of course the newspapers still need to print the news...even though i only read it on the internet now...enjoyed...Rose

[Aethereal]

Thnaks for your review, Syber! The only interesting news is bad news as far as newspapers are concerned.

[Chris]

Chuckling here... a unique insight.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your chuckling review, Chris!

[Chris]

You touched me... what can I say!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the play on "rat" the rats and the ratatat of the guns as we shoot each other...

but i also see another meaning here...trees give us paper on which to write....but we seldom do that anymore...we don't write letters, we seldom write anything long hand on what was giving by the trees...now it is the rat-atat-tat-tat of the keys as we type away on our computers.

nice double meaning here...

one of my favorites i've read in sometime.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for this insightful double meaning review, jacob! Now that we have paperless writing we need those trees all the less. Perhaps the rat-atat-tat-tat of keys shall communicate enough good will around the world to stop the rat-atat-tat-tat of firearms?

[Frieda P]

We are our own worst enemy sometimes, but the show must go on, rats & all I suppose, there's no stopping it now...ratatattat.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for you review, Frieda! Our species conspires to self-extinction.

[Angel]

And this is "progress"???
Perhaps I misunderstood the word...

Very astute poem, indeed...

[Aethereal]

Thanks for being the first to review my poem, Angel! Every night when we watch the evening news we get some idea as to how far our species has devolved from the Paragon that it once was before being cast from that fabled Garden of fruited trees, and sly snakes.