Devolution

The devolution of the human species.

Devolution

 

Many creatures need their trees
it must be understood.
Chipmunks, birds, and honeybees
would perish but for wood.

 

Chirp,

tweet,

buzz, buzz

pollen on the fuzz.

 

Mastering sky, land, and seas,
we ditched our trees for good.
Now we live like rats and fleas
as gangsters in the hood.

 

Rat-a-tat-tat-tat,

rat-a-tat-tat-tat

bang, bang,

boom!

Reviews

[xDalliance]

It's such an awesome read! The idea is brilliant and the sound effects are a nice touch. Makes us think what we've done to nature. I loved the poem! :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Jharna! Destroying the natural ecology about us is a very dangerous thing to do since we have yet to figure out how to duplicate an artificial environment that would result in long term human survival. If we decide to move into outer space, then we would need to carry with us not just ourselves but also elements of Earth's ecology.

[A. Amos]

As you left me two gifts of verses here is first one from me hope you like and enjoy, keep it it's your as my gift..

Without trees how can the world be green
how ugly the world will be viewed from space
earth will be seen like blue a ring
even our kids will fight as there will be no swing...

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your poetic comment, A. Amos! I enjoyed your gift poem.

Our Earth is a bluish ring
set with jewels that green may bring.

[David Scott]

Feels like the movie "Terminator". Ha.
When is progress really progress?
A fine question with an urban flare.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, David! It sounds like what the mass media considers news from day to day. Every passing moment terminates the present whereby each fleeting joy can't wait and thus is lost forever within the rat-a-tat-tat ... if ignored.

[Dhaye]

I enjoyed those lines in alliteration and assonance.
But sad to say, we are the victims of our own mishandling.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Dhaye! The Universe conspires to self-destruct, and we are its self-victimizing children who find joy in doing such on a deep psychological level. Though some of us resist the urge to self-destruct, resistance is futile short of an elusive saving grace that we have no way of grasping. It's our grasping that prevents us from getting what we really need. The best things in life come without a struggle.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

This is some nice work. I really like it.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Mehak!

[Mistylake]

This is so true. Humans don't think much about what they're actually doing to other animals. I enjoyed reading this. It's very good :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Mistylake!

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh fantastic. I am sorry I did not come across this sooner. loved your wry and poignant write.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Pryde!

[Aethereal]

You make a good point here by a shrewd piece of humor, but the fact remains that man is the beast in front of the animals .... chapeau!

- Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Elisa! Man is at the top of the food chain for now.

;) very true my friend...... and you're welcome!

[Abdul Aziz]

Absolutely. The way we humans as a whole live today, disrespecting everything including nature, it is no wonder we've brought such calamities upon ourselves. "We live like rats and fleas as gangsters in the hood". That is a brilliant, snarling description of the despicable lives we lead. On a side note, this reminds me of my poem "The Remnants of Tomorrow", which is somewhat similar to this, although a bit more elaborate, if I can call it that.
Great write!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Abdul! We seem to be of one mind.

[Inspiring Writer]

Nice flow .. i enjoyed the piece. Imaginary's very expressive. A great concept you put up here through the poem to think about it more in deep.. because delusion, devolution, delegation and so on every word's working in a human's life as a medicine .. lol Humans're forgetting the meaning of humanity as i've made one write and you've read already .. so, in today's Arena .. the world's became a place not to live freely but to wrench the every part of the body with the words of distastefulness that rip the heart off with some dishonesty of humans. I loved the great concept you put up here. Well done, Aethereal.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Inspiring Writer! Medicinal words may be a cure for Devolution.