Devolution

Devolution

A Poem by Aethereal
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The devolution of the human species.

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Devolution
 
Many creatures need their trees
it must be understood.
Chipmunks, birds, and honeybees
would perish but for wood.
 

Chirp,

tweet,

buzz, buzz

pollen on the fuzz.

 
Mastering sky, land, and seas,
we ditched our trees for good.
Now we live like rats and fleas
as gangsters in the hood.

 

Rat-a-tat-tat-tat,

rat-a-tat-tat-tat

bang, bang,

boom!

© 2013 Aethereal


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It's such an awesome read! The idea is brilliant and the sound effects are a nice touch. Makes us think what we've done to nature. I loved the poem! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Jharna! Destroying the natural ecology about us is a very dangerous.. read more
As you left me two gifts of verses here is first one from me hope you like and enjoy, keep it it's your as my gift..

Without trees how can the world be green
how ugly the world will be viewed from space
earth will be seen like blue a ring
even our kids will fight as there will be no swing...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your poetic comment, A. Amos! I enjoyed your gift poem.

Our Earth is a bl.. read more
Feels like the movie "Terminator". Ha.
When is progress really progress?
A fine question with an urban flare.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, David! It sounds like what the mass media considers news from day to day. Ev.. read more
I enjoyed those lines in alliteration and assonance.
But sad to say, we are the victims of our own mishandling.


Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Dhaye! The Universe conspires to self-destruct, and we are its self-victimiz.. read more
This is some nice work. I really like it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Mehak!
This is so true. Humans don't think much about what they're actually doing to other animals. I enjoyed reading this. It's very good :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Mistylake!
Oh fantastic. I am sorry I did not come across this sooner. loved your wry and poignant write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago


Thanks for your review, Pryde!
You make a good point here by a shrewd piece of humor, but the fact remains that man is the beast in front of the animals .... chapeau!

- Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Elisa! Man is at the top of the food chain for now.

11 Years Ago

;) very true my friend...... and you're welcome!
Absolutely. The way we humans as a whole live today, disrespecting everything including nature, it is no wonder we've brought such calamities upon ourselves. "We live like rats and fleas as gangsters in the hood". That is a brilliant, snarling description of the despicable lives we lead. On a side note, this reminds me of my poem "The Remnants of Tomorrow", which is somewhat similar to this, although a bit more elaborate, if I can call it that.
Great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Abdul! We seem to be of one mind.
Nice flow .. i enjoyed the piece. Imaginary's very expressive. A great concept you put up here through the poem to think about it more in deep.. because delusion, devolution, delegation and so on every word's working in a human's life as a medicine .. lol Humans're forgetting the meaning of humanity as i've made one write and you've read already .. so, in today's Arena .. the world's became a place not to live freely but to wrench the every part of the body with the words of distastefulness that rip the heart off with some dishonesty of humans. I loved the great concept you put up here. Well done, Aethereal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Inspiring Writer! Medicinal words may be a cure for Devolution.

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