Romantic Lullaby

Romantic Lullaby

A Poem by Aethereal
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A lullaby about a romantic evening on the beach.

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Romantic Lullaby
 
Waltz with me
under lunar light
where the sea
whispers songs all night.
 
Let us flee
to a stellar height
where we see
meteors ignite.
 
Let low key
love songs expedite
fantasy
as we hold hands tight.
 
Let us be
as the stars in flight
floating free
till the sky grows bright.

© 2013 Aethereal


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Nicely penned and enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the theme...Rose:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks, SyberRose! My rhymes sing like songs. I hear the music in my head and then I write the poem.
Pretty Good Lullaby!! Nice Rhyme!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks, Bimash!
Bimash Budha

11 Years Ago

You're always welcome!!! :)
This is beautiful... Your rhyme scheme and your choice of words make this lullaby flow so easily that the reader could almost fall into a trance... I love a daring rhyme scheme and you make it look so effortless... Though it's such a simple moment of bliss, you've created such a well-written poem that you've made it a moment the reader craves for long after they're finished reading... Well done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Hannah! Most of my rhyme schemes are daring. I dare anyone to do th.. read more
This has a gentle melodic feel to it. The rhyme accentuates the waltz being performed: it is a periodic cycle of two. It is a somewhat dangerous rhyme scheme to attempt, because maintaining the pattern sometimes requires the use of forced rhymes, which drag the poem down. But here, you have done a very good job. I like the poem for the simplicity of its romance. It is more close to home and therefore easier to relate to. Very effective writing! Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Augustus! I never force a rhyme, and all of my rhyme schemes are da.. read more
The choice of rhyme is so eloquent, this is indeed a sweet serenade of the heart melting variety!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Tom! I wonder if it's possible for a mating pair to find love durin.. read more
Tom

11 Years Ago

Now you've got me thinking Athereal, you old devil you !!
I'm waltzing reading this marvelous poem. I like it alot...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Sami!
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
So romantic, A. Nice imagery here. I can see myself in bare feet, holding hands with my love, while dancing under the moonlight...at the sea shore.

I like the use of anaphora, alliteration and assonance in some words.
Great job here, A!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Dhaye! Sound is important in all of my poems.
Dhaye

11 Years Ago

Great! Each poet has his own preferences and styles...There are too many literary devices to use and.. read more
Lets not be in a rush, lets dance all night... I love the swaying beat of this piece. Nicely done, Aethereal. Angi~

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Angi! I had to make it a sing with a beat if it was to be a lullaby.. read more
i like, especially, the idea of the low key love songs. love that burns too hot, too bright, too fast is ephemeral...burns itself out quickly as it turns on its heat...but a steady love, a steady soft glow...that lasts.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your insightful review, jacob! Here we have a slow burn as nocturnal moments turn under t.. read more
This is one lullaby that won't put you to sleep, waltzing under the stars by the sea, what could be lovelier?Play that tune all night long.....well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your review of my lullaby, Frieda! But it would be like a dream in itself.

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Added on September 12, 2013
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Tags: lullaby, romance, moon, stars, love, music, sea

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