Adriana

Adriana is lost at sea when her caravel sinks in a storm.

Adriana

 

Lightning hit.The mainsail burned
as her caravel upturned.
Forceful waves that heaved and churned
separated stem from stern.

 

All on board were lost but she,
Adriana floating free
clutching pieces of debris
at the mercy of the sea.

 

Adriana in her plight
fought the storm throughout the night
until dark gave way to light
bringing her an awesome sight.

 

Rising tall above the waves
stood a beach with cliffs and caves
giving her the hope she craves
as it beckons, as it saves.

 

She took her chance, all or none,
swimming for the rising sun.
Long before that day was done
her bold dash for shore was won.

 

On a flood tide, she was swept.
In her gratefulness, she wept
as she came ashore, and stepped
over dry land where she slept.

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The poem is about the journey of a boat at sea named Adriana.

[Aethereal]

The ship in this poem is a caravel. Adriana is a pretty girl who survives its sinking only to be stranded on a tropical island. Adriana would be a good name for a sailboat in any case.

[Daffy]

Very enjoyable read. The words allow one to see as though she were Adriana. I always like to think there is more in this than meets the eye...and as such I can imagine a catastrophe in Adriana's life that is represented by the lightening bolt. Deserted, she is swimming alone in a sea of hopelessness, but her determination and strength of character, so typical in a woman, allows herself to pull through and to end up with hope and a future. What a wonderful write and read. Thanks.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for this wonderful interpretation of my poem as a metaphor for what goes on in the lives of most women as they encounter the ‘slings and arrows’ of life, Daffy!

[Daffy]

slings and arrows says all...

[Aethereal]

I got the phrase ‘slings and arrows’ from Shakespeare.

[Great Aunt Astri]

An analogy for the lives of many of us! I like the way you leave it open ended. Perhaps in imagining Adriana's future some of us might fix our own!
Lovely poem.

[Aethereal]

Thinks for your insightful review, Astri! Everyone finds themselves in a struggle as some time or another. We all have open ended lives, for life is a gamble where our cards are only shuffled once, and Jokers are Wild.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Too true! We can but develop coping strategies that suit us

[Angi]

Dramatic sea story, Aethereal! These are one of my favorite kinds of poems. I wonder what will happen to Adriana now? Angi~

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Angi! It's possible that she meets the love of her life on this tropical island while fighting cannibals, and pirates. For now, I’ll leave her stretched out nude on the beach as cannibals approach from the distance, hungry cannibals.

[Angi]

Ha! I like that image!

[Sasha]

wow .. beautiful writing ! :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Sasha!

[Distantview123]

A dramatic narrative , well told. An interesting write. ~ Robert.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Robert!

[Kelly Scheppers]

What an intriguing story teller you are! Very nice, my friend!


My best,
Kelly

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review of my story poem, Kelly!

[Kelly Scheppers]

..you're very welcomed, my pleasure!

[Aethereal]

This is just beautiful my friend, I listened to your words, and had a song in my mind... that does your cadance always, it's matematical, and full of the right rhythm.

I listened to this piece, while your words would fit in perfectly, if you follow it slowly,
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p1AUiEQIZRs

It could be even a song then... so beautiful...
I hear you always :) thank you for sharing such a great sea poem!
Once I did a North-Sea series on this musician, it's further in my library.

You always write with your whole musical heart.
Extra info: I love the name, my dad's name is Adriano

- Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed musical review, Elisa! Yes, this poem followes a seven beat cadence related to seven syllable meter. It's a story, a poem, a song. Adriana is a sing-song type name.

Great! You're always welcome my friend... I liked this one ;)

[BreatheBrittany]

So vivid and full of detail. Your rhyme is impressive, and the flow is like... wow. Great job, keep it up.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Brittany! I'm in love with the flow of cadence. Every event is a song.

[icelandicblue]

A wonderful story of adventure and as always your rhyme is absolute perfection.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, blue! This poem reads somewhat like an epic song of adventure, and if continued perhaps a tropical island song of romance as well. Perhaps ancient Greek poems sung this way when they were read aloud in their native tongues to the tune of harps and pipes in romantic classical garden get-a-ways?