Nature

This is a poem that I wrote about Nature for a contest whereby I relate Nature to life.

Nature

 

How would Nature ever know

of her graceful might,

but for living things who grow

hugging her charms tight?

 

Deep within her undertow

powered by her light,

ears and eyes form to bestow

her with sound and sight.

 

Though her processes are slow,

she finds just the right

living things that overflow

every gainful site.

 

Life is meant to overthrow

voids of self delight

basking Nature in the glow

that our minds ignite.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

An interesting concept...I've never really seen Nature personified in this way before. I like the use of "she" and "her", because I believe that if nature were a human she would be a she. The first and last stanzas were my favorites in terms of both content and flow. I had a little "flow" trouble with the second stanza, the lines "ears and eyes form to bestow/her with sound and sight", I'm not sure exactly why, but they caused me pause and required a second reading. On a whole, though, you delight with this piece of work. The words are beautiful, and as I said the first and last stanzas are absolutely spot on!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Sarah! Ears are needed for her to hear sounds that she makes, and eyes are need for her to see herself. I could have included all the other senses. She discovers herself through the process of life. Life is Nature's method of self-discovery. The senses evolve, or form along with mind.

[Aethereal]

A true honest, and well written ode to nature, ~ Gaia, ~ Hestia, (Vespa), ~ Demeter, and ~ Isis all would be smiling at you for turning out such a good fertile write... :) fantastic as ever, in great flow, and cadance of the beauty of your quill... meaningful and brilliant my friend...

- Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Elisa! I try when ever possible to write new poems for contests that I enter instead of throwing in one of my old poems. I wrote this poem in less than an hour with the Natue contest in mind. It was fun to write. During the Fall and Winter months, I usually write one or two poems a day as I'm inspired to do so.

And I like your compatetive spirit... (me, I had that time...) just writing out of pure intentions right now, and not for others than my only close friends... :) but always in high level, (emotional, or rational) it depends... you're so welcome my friend.,, I'm bored of the contests on here, to be honest, I've almost written about anything yet... and I deal with my first writersblock, it's good, (not feeling healthy yet, in phisical healt) so now I can take a bit of balance... :) be back soon for more though, I never forget you.

[Inspiring Writer]

I enjoyed the poem, i wanted to read a bit in this manner you wrote. As you said about middle stanzas" yeh, i removed those stanza when i was reading the piece and i loved that two stanzas but then i realize about those other one's and read again and again, i got that it's need to be in 4 phrases. It's a good write there's no need to cut down any phrase. I enjoyed reading this piece much and you can't believe the i read this piece 5-10 times again and again to understand the depth of the write. Keep writing and Good luck :) I loved this beautiful piece that's written on life... about life.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Inspiring Writer! It's a deep poem.

[Inspiring Writer]

Yeh, i know, i did understand this poem that's why i did love. So, let me know now, what you were thinking about when you were jotting the words on a paper ?

[Aethereal]

I was thinking that we are the eyes, ears, and minds of Nature. Nature knows herself through us, through life. Life gives Nature knowledge about herself, and an awareness of her beauty.

[Inspiring Writer]

I got it.. Hey, can you change the title of this poem. Write the title 'NATURE' ?
I Loved this write but if you can change the title then plz... it'd be great to me to understand much and it's a strong link here in your this write.