Summer's Child

A poem about Summer and childhood.

Summer's  Child

 

Charming toddler evermore
hugging Summer's new allure
many tears of joy will flow,
don't forget them as you grow.

 

Don't forget that tabby cat
snuggled closely where you sat
as you watched the crescent moon
climb the starry skies of June.

 

Don't forget those training wheels,
turning corners, coasting hills,
touring through the neighborhood,
how the grownups understood.

 

Don't forget the love you had
for your momma, for your dad.
Novelty shall go astray,
playfulness soon melts away.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

It is a sad truth that we must all grow up. I think there comes a point in all of our lives when we look back on childhood and wish that we could live it over, if only for one small summer...to be a little girl again, running along a beach, swimming in the backyard pool, skating down the "big hill" with my best friends; it would be a refreshing change of pace.

Technically: I liked the flow of this one, and the form that you used was nice. I also enjoyed the imagery, especially the tangible and descriptive things like "tabby cat" and "training wheels". Only suggestion might be to tackle a few more difficult end rhymes: instead of "sat" and "cat" stick with things like "neighborhood" and "understood".

Overall, though, I truly enjoyed this one. The emotion and concept were both stellar and got me thinking this morning. Nicely done.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your helpful review, Sarah! I'll try to use fewer three letter rhymes in the future. I was trying to write a poem that a child could understand, and so I used a simpler vocabulary.

[NeiL ArandA]

You nailed the last stanza well Aethereal .

Don't forget the love you had
for your momma, for your dad.
Novelty shall go astray,
playfulness soon melts away.

You are very good with rhymes . I really like the suppleness of this piece however speaks common sense and virtues

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Neil! This was based on experiences that I have had with charming neighborhood children at play. They are so happy at play, and yet I know about the storm they are heading into as they grow out of childhood.

[NeiL ArandA]

I knew that all too well. I love Mark Twain anecdote. I think he wrote the something about a boy who doesn't want to grow old. And it does make sense. I have the best time of my life when I was a kid or a little boy. When I start to become a man then I realized how stressful and complex life really is..

[Inspiring Writer]

it' sweet write, last stanza's made by you with you inner essence of your soul. You made it in a relaxing time. You've pointed out about Human's whole life... didn't you!
It's a Inspirational one too for kids... if any kid reads this piece he'd be enjoy too as a reader does. It's so true piece.
You always made me speechless with your beautiful stuffs indeed...don't you! :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Inspiring Writer! I was thinking about children whom I've know in the past and the neighborhood in which the played as I was writing this poem.

[Rahul]

TRUTHNESS'S is shining from this piece. Words're so real and you did a great job.100/100

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Rahul! I've had years of experience supervising small children. I know them.

[Rahul]

Really...!
so, are you married ?

[Aethereal]

I'm not married, but I've had many friends who are married with children who I have supervised from time to time in educational way.

[Rahul]

Ohh..i see, so you meant are you a teacher...i meant what you do..?

[Aethereal]

I've taught Mathematics and English from time to time, but I'm not doing that now, or am I ?

[Rahul]

Haha :)
well, my maths' s horrible and terrrrriiible as well.lol ,it's a great that you spells your knowledge to others.
so, do you teach in college or in a schooll or in universities /?

[Sami Khalil]

Summer is upon us . What a better way to celebrate it like a good poem here...:)

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Sami! Summer is a delightful time for children at play. Play is half or their education.

[Sami Khalil]

Ture...You are welcome...:)

[Aethereal]

The "r" is just above the "f" on the keyboard, and so it's easy to hit it instead of the other when typing fast. We'll leave 'em as they R.

[Sami Khalil]

No biggie...You are welcome...:)