Imagine Life Without World

Imagine life without sun's light

Imagine life without --- rain

See --- we always need light

There will always be pain

Early as the --- morning dew

Coolness of the morning breeze

How to know what's true?

How to make it bliss?

The world works like this:

Some things may not be together

Apart from whom we surely miss

Nothing would stay forever

Let us forget the world

Reality, like droplets of rain

Won't let the joy unfurled

And this may sound insane

Try to imagine what life can be?

Without this dark hopeless world.

Oh, how could I be happy to see

If we let the happiness unfurl

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Seems this was done without edit...so from a merit point of view with the subject matter --- you convey a world we rarely visit --- since everything is offered to us at no cost...I would go back and edit this work of yours to give the flow and feel this deserves...here's an example:


Imagine life without sunlight
Imagine life without rain
See we always need a light
But there will always be the pain

As early as the morning dew
the coolness of the morning breeze
How to know what's true?
How to make it bliss?

The world works like this:
Some things may not be together
And apart from whom we surely miss
Nothing would stay forever

Let us forget the world
Reality, like droplets of rain
Won't let the joy unfurled
And this may sound insane

But try to imagine what life can be?
Without this dark hopeless world.
Oh, how could I happy to see
If we let the happiness unfurl

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edited...


Imagine life without sun's light
Imagine life without --- rain
See --- we always need light
There will always be pain

Early as the --- morning dew
Coolness of the morning breeze
How to know what's true?
How to make it bliss?

The world works like this:
Some things may not be together
Apart from whom we surely miss
Nothing would stay forever

Let us forget the world
Reality, like droplets of rain
Won't let the joy unfurled
And this may sound insane

Try to imagine what life can be?
Without this dark hopeless world.
Oh, how could I be happy to see
If we let the happiness unfurl

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Of course...this is your work...do what makes you be happy...good day...

[Aerielle Louise]

Thank you for editing.. It really helped me improve my writing. Thank you so much

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...