Miraculous You

This is a poem that I am currently handing out in public. It is a work that definately needs critiqing. Thanks

The Magnificence of you.

Hidden, perfect.

In all that you do.

Living work of art.

True love is all things.

Universal clues.

The solution to the illusions we face.

For all is in dream.

And seen in the eyes of hope,

a unity of life.

One single person in existence.

God element,

eternal intelligence,

calling you, from within.

Spin of light and dark, through days,

flowing like a river in time.

Devine memories through the shines of our smiles and desires.

Fires of passion ignite our reality of life.

I light a candle for you, as you, to lead to the place of grace.

As all is in the shades of confusion,

pollution of fear, doubt and guilt.

Built upon the hills of hell and hatred,

the sacred was lost.

Life tossed away.

And through the vision of self-sacrifice,

we all write out a reality much darker than the truth.

Moving to the source of Self.

I see the wealth of peace and harmony.

What else?

The darkness just spells out the strength of soul.

To realize that nothing dies,

to speak the language of Life.

To decide to arise from this chaotic night.

And as the light of the sun does come,

upon horizons of future,

to surprise oneself with the wise heights of bliss.

All unreal before you.

To partake of this...

Consciousness cannot be conscious if it is separate.

And yet we are left in a state of individual silence.

The one mind divided by time.

For what is infinitely unifed can never be taken apart.

Eternal life of your heart.

I feel your kindness,

and the flawless vision you hold dear.

Clear to me that you hear your own song.

And along your path I hop eyou dance upon the dark.

Mark of the Living art.

Magnificent you.

Angelic you.

Miracle you.

True.

Reviews

[there is no more from m..]

amazing i enjoyed this i really liked it i found it amazing

[JadedSparrow]

I truly enjoyed the content. There is something chaotic about the way this is written which I found to be very appealing as well. As for critiquing it, if I were going to change anything, I would work on the actual structure of the poem. With some lines considerably longer than others, it might be better to center the piece. Nevertheless, I enjoyed it. Keep writing.

JS