You love tantalizing your readers with such breathtaking imagery, don't you? :) I'm in love with your writing. You use such brilliant colours and imagery, usually touching on all five "senses" we have. Coming to this poem, I think it can't be bettered, no matter which way I look at it. And the title is simply amazing! Beautifully written, though sad.
this is so beautful and visual and darn right intuned! I could smell and feel the ocean and the crisp sand! (Florida Girl) ♥ the ocean and I just DARN RIGHT LOVE THE WHOLE THING! AMAZING WORK!
I really liked the beginning of each stanza "once, before, now", very simple and very effective! I love the imagery of tears drying up and becoming sand. Good work.
Simply beautiful I lack better words. I liked the once, before, adn now structure. Nice rhyme scheme and it flows well. Such a beautiful way to desrcibe hearbreak.. Wonderful work :D
Every part of this poem is simply beautiful. I love the 'once' 'before' and 'now' at the beginning of each stanza, and there's just this amicable rhythm and flow that sort of takes you away. I got lost in the words, I had to rack my brain a little to understand the last stanza, however, I just think that's my weakness with reading poetry and reaching a good analysis. I would love to come back and give it another try, so I'm shelving it :) Beautiful job.
I write poetry and occasionally short stories as a hobby... I am so completely lost in what I want to do with my life.. But I enjoy what little bit of life I do have...
I have a cat named Elvis and .. more..