Sand Became My Tears

Sand Became My Tears

A Poem by Aella.lives

Once,

I had lost myself to dreams,

To the tide that carried them to the shore and handed me an ocean,

I raised them to know no harms,

Until I lost time.

 

Before,

I had a heart,

That pounded within my chest a stream of conscious love,

I bled water that was innocent,

Until it became dry.

 

Now,

My tears are bereft of blue,

Because blue was the color of my salivation that I let myself believe in,

It was a flourish of my humility,

Until sand became my tears. 

© 2012 Aella.lives


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You love tantalizing your readers with such breathtaking imagery, don't you? :) I'm in love with your writing. You use such brilliant colours and imagery, usually touching on all five "senses" we have. Coming to this poem, I think it can't be bettered, no matter which way I look at it. And the title is simply amazing! Beautifully written, though sad.

Posted 12 Years Ago


'I bled water that was innocent,
Until it became dry.'

some lovely images to this, great structure and i liked the romance in the language. fantastic.



Posted 12 Years Ago


Beautiful. I love it! Your poem is moving and very well written :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



I think you are an angel who can become very very sad and very very blissful, and you know, it teaches us to feel.

1. It was a flourish of my humility

OH! and the line of the month goes to:

2. That pounded within my chest a stream of conscious love

Posted 12 Years Ago


beyond beautiful, this one gave me absolute chills! Bravo my southern neighbor!

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is so beautful and visual and darn right intuned! I could smell and feel the ocean and the crisp sand! (Florida Girl) ♥ the ocean and I just DARN RIGHT LOVE THE WHOLE THING! AMAZING WORK!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really liked the beginning of each stanza "once, before, now", very simple and very effective! I love the imagery of tears drying up and becoming sand. Good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I agree with Katarina about the "once, before and now". Well done top to bottom

Posted 12 Years Ago


Simply beautiful I lack better words. I liked the once, before, adn now structure. Nice rhyme scheme and it flows well. Such a beautiful way to desrcibe hearbreak.. Wonderful work :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Every part of this poem is simply beautiful. I love the 'once' 'before' and 'now' at the beginning of each stanza, and there's just this amicable rhythm and flow that sort of takes you away. I got lost in the words, I had to rack my brain a little to understand the last stanza, however, I just think that's my weakness with reading poetry and reaching a good analysis. I would love to come back and give it another try, so I'm shelving it :) Beautiful job.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on April 9, 2012
Last Updated on April 9, 2012
Tags: sand, water, ocean, dry, love, lost, dreams, poem, poetry

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Aella.lives
Aella.lives

Bitter Isles, GA



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I write poetry and occasionally short stories as a hobby... I am so completely lost in what I want to do with my life.. But I enjoy what little bit of life I do have... I have a cat named Elvis and .. more..

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