Nice read here stating with things being good or innocent till a change weighs upon them sort of being found then lost so to speak sad agony here but nicely written as always keep writing fellow writer.
A calm ocean corrupted by heartbreak. You know what I like about your poems? You combine synonyms that seem like they shouldn't go together, but the way you do it makes it make sense.
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Oh, yes thank you! I always try different things, so I'm glad when people acknowledge them.
I really enjoyed this poem mainly because of the numbing feeling that I got from it. As sand becomes tears... as emotions become so bland and grainy that they're simply dry now, nothing of distinct value... "I raised them to no harms, Until I lost time", meaning that eventually time meant nothing. Nothing meant anything anymore.
i don't know why but i get the impression of bright colours dancing in wild, uncontained movements. Might just be me, but i enjoyed this very much, esp the line;
To the tide that carried them to the shore and handed me an ocean.
well done :)
I write poetry and occasionally short stories as a hobby... I am so completely lost in what I want to do with my life.. But I enjoy what little bit of life I do have...
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