How Your Lies Remind Me of a Waterfall

Mist forms from your mouth

And falls from your stubble chin

Scrapes and grinds with air

         It’s not mixed well with truth

 

You know cares that tremble

And shatter without breath

Rushed from the lips of rain

         They plummet from your tongue

 

Hands smooth but callused palm

Catches mist that dribbled down

Stopping lies and seeping scarlet

         Conflicting with emerald eyes

 

Indifferent wave of torrid motions

I never knew I had

But I cannot design a river without

         Knowing where the waterfall lies.

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

But I cannot design a river without

Knowing where the waterfall lies.
... cool. Just, like, cool. It just... makes sense. Like it should be so complex its simple.

[asdarkeyesclose]

'But I cannot design a river without
Knowing where the waterfall lies.'

i liked what you did with the ideas of mist and 'lips of rain' in this and the truth/lies contrast. fantastic.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

whoa........

i already sensed the unique metaphor from the title
nice write

[MOON]

This is stunning so many great lines , the last two lines are simply beautiful and I love the rhythm.

[Forevermore]

damn i love this, great write

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

You know cares that tremble and shatter without breath.........how did I miss this one? Simply wow!

[SuicidePact.]

the title! wow loved it.
i love this poem so much, yes i say that alot but it's true!

[reflectingus]

*Applause*
This is sheer genius, I never actually imagined lies to be this way, and I'm thoroughly impressed with your thought process. Lies indeed can be compared to a waterfall, the flowness, the ease, and the deadly and shamelessness, in a way, takes this waterfall to a whole new level of significance. I do love the actual poetry, but what I love more is the connotation, the voice behind the words. Also, the last line was quite intelligent, the double meaning of 'lies', and I'm still genuinely dazzled.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

This made me shiver! You are a woman of embracing perception.

1. Stopping lies and seeping scarlet
2. Knowing where the waterfall lies

[Priya]

I must admit I couldn't totally understand a few things, but your style is spectacular! Your cadence and rhythm draws the reader in totally