Where I Reside

Where my garden lies,

Behind the shrubs and dandelions,

I follow trails that lead me lost,

To keep to heart and not just home.

 

Where I stay is in shallow talks,

Of mystery and lack of faith,

Such to me sounds like apathy,

Just like my cheerless metronome.

 

Where my wits really live,

Are but of chivvied ache.

Do not call me back to pain,

For I am not sure I could sing to that.

 

Where my love waits is not at now,

But of then and bunks with hope.

To a better day of tomorrow,

And maybe they will return.

 

Where my voice may reside,

Is in my eyes when you speak to me.

No grief is passed through you,

Lost, are those feelings now.

 

Where I dwell is in a form of things,

Such as every cave.

But if I can call forth all my self,

You would get a person whole. 

Reviews

[Ivory]

This poem is very powerful with its words. Has air of saddness to it as well. I enjoyed this piece.

[Abdul Aziz]

Outstanding! I believe you've got a style all your own. Originality is pretty hard to find these days, as all free verse poems look like each other. But this is special. Your ability to echo poetry of a distant generation using techniques of today is, quite simply, special. The whole poem brims with quotable lines! A new favorite.

[AK]

Wonderful poem! I really liked the imagery and use of descriptive words. The first line was really good and caught my attention. Great write!

[reflectingus]

What caught my attention is your style of writing. Your vocabulary is definitely strong, I just adore your sophisticated style and choice of words, and also, I love the repetition of 'where', making the line at the beginning of each stanza similar. This is thoroughly expressive, and also a pleasure to read, the rhythm just leaves me wanting for more, and I'm just blown away with this write.
"Do not call me back to pain,
For I am not sure I could sing to that."

[Kelly Scheppers]

I was left in awe by the 4th verse...then the 5th. Then I realized I could have highlighted the entire poem!

What an extraordinary poet you are!


My best,
Kelly

[Priya]

This is absolutely beautiful! Your poem has an inherent musicality in it, a throbbing rhythm that drives it. Every word is carefully placed. Every stanza is beautiful, but I liked the first stanza the most. Your imagery and choice of words is perfect!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I take the coldness of others in this, to be honest, it regards the reader rather than leading them, well done, good read.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

What a wonderful write, I really like the 3rd stanza especially. The tone was just so sincere, haunted and natural.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

do not call me back to pain........you would get a person whole...love your writing.

[Forevermore]

your diction is on point, you have a creative way of saying something with out just saying it, great write