Less Loving One

Thoughts master my heart,

Waves of thunder rattle my soul.

Pride shines into my face,

And I am the weaker one.

 

Travesty, where are you now?

The rolling tides of sorrow have reached the beach,

Casting their lonely bones onto the feet of infants.

Can you let me be the less loving one?

 

Reside in the buoy, in a land of soft muscles,

Stretched broad into the cavern of my arms.

Wrench away this amorous air,

Into a distortion we can only reach with skin. 

 

Eternity in the skies of my mind,

Floating in the allowed abyss.

With eyes as a blank canvas,

I will become the less loving one. 

Reviews

[DrD]

I am so glad that i stumbled upon your by chance but will return often on purpose. I enjoy your work immensely.

[Aella.lives]

Well thank you!! Glad you liked it. :)

[MoriartyMesa]

"Reside in the buoy, in a land of soft muscles,

Stretched broad into the cavern of my arms.

Wrench away this amorous air,"


Now that is worth more images than a man could think of, love the flow and wording.

[Aella.lives]

Thank you! :)

[MOON]

This is poignant, takes you on a journey of the heart and it's sorrow.

[Aella.lives]

Yes, yes it does. Thank you!

[Monique]

I am so impressed by your writing. its always really deep but understandable

[I Shred This Cabbage]

what a beautiful sentiment; let me be the less loving one. feeling unappreicated, more the giver than reciever. an anditote to the usual; you have loved enough, now let me be the lover kind of thing. well done :)

Wrench away this amorous air, my favourite line.

[AK]

Very nice poem! You have an amazing stlye of writing!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A magical feel to this piece, well done, good read.

[patricia]

a lovely poem. first for its mystical feel, almost free-floating, flying. and then for its observations and conclusions. my favourite line...Wrench away this amorous air. i like to think there is more than just the love of Eros to be known. Thankyou.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I love the sensual third stanza!

[Forevermore]

i love it, its got a good feel to it, awesome work