Cimmerian Home

The call came in at a quarter to noon,

The air was fusty and the grounds were cold.

It was a sprat of a man on the other end,

That told me such a thing.

 

 

My eyes they drift to the far corners of the room,

Where a spider web has formed.

The monster in the middle weaves its home,

Writing down my name.

 

 

I drift apart for a moment or two,

Forgetting about the man.

And for a second I can believe that he is a beast,

Speaking to me fallaciously.

 

 

The outside place is devastatingly beautiful,

With a swallow playing a melody on a branch.

Though the walls within this space are gray,

And the lights are dimmed to nothing.

 

 

The sounds the man makes are poignant,

As he tells me such a thing.

The far corners of the room are calling,

Where the spider weaves my Cimmerian home.

Author's Note

For those that don't know: “Cimmerian” which is from the Greek mythology relating to or denoting members of a mythical people who lived in perpetual mist and darkness near the land of the dead.

Reviews

[asdarkeyesclose]

'Though the walls within this space are gray,
And the lights are dimmed to nothing.'

a great last stanza to this, i loved the concept of the cimmerian and the way you drew the imagery of the spider, this is quite edgy, i liked it a lot!

[Priya]

I'm sorry for not being able to provide anything constructive. This is going in my favorites. You have this ability to weave such magical images with your words. Almost all poems of yours that I've read have been created with utmost care. It shows :)

[Forevermore]

u have great word usage, and the feel of this is interesting and unique

[Kelly Scheppers]

I can only voice what those have said before me...and add that your caliber of writing is quite intriguing!

My best,
Kelly

[s.r.knight]

The fact that you slid a bit of Greek mythology into this poem is awesome! You use very rich vocabulary which makes for a very refreshing read. Well done!

[Who Cares]

I LOVE Greek mythology, I am literally obsessed with it, yeah yeah call me a nerd if you would like :D. Pretty sweet vocabulary usage as well as the style you chose to write in. It is like you are listening to someones thoughts. Great job

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Love Greek mythology, and I loved this write. Gothic, and bittersweet imagery to perfection. Nicely done!

[SuicidePact.]

i love greek mythology, and i love this poem, it was liek reading a book, yet reading someones thoughts.

[reflectingus]

I love that allusion to the Greek mythology, definitely something that fascinates me, and this brings your writing to this unique, historical level, and also this dream-world, where we would dread going. Emotions have been vividly played, the flow is flawless, and the words are intense. This is very creative, and leaves this eerie feeling, and it actually feels good. I loved this poem, from the beginning to the end. This is flawless beauty.

[Marie]

Clever...sometimes it's easy to drift awat when what you hear is too dull to hold your attention.