Long Goodbye

Long Goodbye

A Poem by Adster

She cries like a monochrome starlet

Caught trapped in an old time movie.

Her eyes, matted with clustered tears

We sigh, in this tender of instants.

No farewells just a million regrets.

 

Take our time, to hold on the fondness

Of each other and the feeling of skin.

Lips soft with unresisting confession

Of a need for the others embrace.

Don’t let go of this thing we know.

 

The heart breaks in a tattered line

Torn in two, don’t think I’ll ever be fine.

Your hair, so soft combed in the fingers

Can’t let you go, why do we have to part?

You drop you arms, then you walk away.

 

Too long to wait, before I’m ever with you

Maybe a year perhaps another two.

Take my time to correct my mistakes

The one’s I made to send you away.

Let me see you, one last long goodbye.

© 2008 Adster


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Wow, this is an amazing poem. I've felt this way for someone too, it seems a long time ago. Leaving somebody you love is so hard and writing about is equally a challenge, but you've done it perfectly. It leaves me with such a feeling of sadness, reminding me of all those I've lost along the way and those darn regrets that come with leaving those behind. Great write!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Take our time, to hold on the fondness
Of each other and the feeling of skin.
Lips soft with unresisting confession
Of a need for the others embrace.
Don't let go of this thing we have.
The heart tears with a tattered line
Torn in two, don't think I'll ever be fine.

The two center verses broke my reserve. You have captured the goodbye ever so well at least one that still holds feelings between lovers. Now I need to find some comedy to fix the empty void you brought out with your poem. Didn't know that you had it in you to bring emotion to the table. Superb! Thanks for entering it in the Hearts Apart contest. Brie

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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