Words

i don't know

Standing here lifeless, emotionless

I am expressionless and colorless

Feeling so lethargic, spiritless

Inside I have become so desolate

Inside, I

Whisper and scream

As time goes by I

Can't stop sobbing

I can't control myself

Sitting in this stillness

This quietness and silence

Instead of your loving hushes

The night darkens and deadens

Speechless, there is no sound

No tone in my voice, no music, no notes

To resonate and reverberate

How can I begin to articulate how this feels?

I can barely utter a word

I can't fathom, can't grasp it

Can you articulate, do you understand?

Does anyone recognize, realize how this came to happen?

Moaning, stomach churning

Skin white as snow, without the pretty glow

Pale and gross, short breaths

I hate this, nauseating feeling

Can someone alleviate,

Cure and heal

Relieve and ease

This horrible disease

With my scars I tried to hide

With this emptiness inside

A deathly hole in this heart

Now I'm trying to put back the pieces and parts

Weakened, but strong?

Delicate and fragile

Pathetic, imperfect

Sitting in this stillness

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Your words took me to a lonely place. Some we find desperation and confusion. We must find a place to rebirth and release the pain. I like the last paragraph. In life we must be strong sometime. And weak when necessary. A powerful poem. Strong description and story made the words come alive. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Miss Coral]

Powerful- wonderful language altogether, but the emotion especially was vivid and strong. You might consider playing around with the first stanza a bit though, because I found the words ending in "less" a little too repetitive after a while, even if you meant that to be a strong hitting point. I just didn't really work for me.

Overall, nice job- again, great vocab and emotion.

-Coral-

[Lighthouse Call]

wow. that was a beautiful poem. rich vocabulary, i'm impressed. At points we're stuck and we go to this state, as I'd call it. Sometimes you just have to stand up and start walking. Incredible write.

[inside unknown]

i may review this again later, cuz im not in a serious mood.. all im gonna say is: nice use of vocab words.