END OF THE BEGINNING

Presenting to you my approach of looking at MOTHER nature. It's liberating and mesmerizing. Hope you will like it.

"END OF THE BEGINNING"

Once again mother nature sets her course,

To bid farewell  to shredding leaves of deciduous trees,

Shimmering red and yellow leaves here and there,

Floats around like fire in the air!

All dressed up as gold and red brown dresses,

The trees are laughing once again,

Earthy hues and autumn star,

Joins to make a perfect picturesque landscape,

Crisp, cold breeze touching and blowing against my hairs,

Whispered adieu once again!!!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'END OF THE BEGINNING'
Aditi Nagvanshi,
This was lovely! I truly appreciate the transforming aspects of the autumn season.
'All dressed up as gold and red brown dresses,
The trees are laughing once again,
Earthy hues and autumn star,'
Sweet tribute to a sweet season.
Bless you.
Kathy

[Jade]

ah sweet bliss of autumn, This is written so well.
You have talent.

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thank you Brandie for your kind words. It means alot.

[Jade]

not a problem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

my favorite season so well visualized with your slant rhyme and in-line rhyme and really nice imagery.
j.

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou so much for your words of appraisal Jacob :)

[Ghost writer]

I love fall, I like the unique way you talked about it.

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou so much for your words! I really appreciate it :)

[Robert Trakofler]

i love fall most of all! no season stirs me more than the evidence of autumn the colors the smells the breeze message of changes to come:) You paint a very nice picture in these words to the bunny. this had a nice rhyme and rhythm to it also is best read aloud in my opinion. just a suggestion but in the first line...
Once again mother nature has sets her course
might flow better if you omit the s in sets or you could just write....
Once again mother nature sets her course
(omitting the has) an easy oversight:)

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou Sir for your review! I will definately do as u suggested.

[Jibey]

There is always a pleasure in the autumn colours. The images while together here - shredding, shimmering, floating, dressing, laughing - each has its place in the riot of Autumn hues.

I liked the personal touch - the crisp breeze against your hair... But don't over-do the exclamation marks. Less is more!

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou Jibey for your words. I will definately do as you suggested.

[Vatsal Rohilla]

You have painted a lively scene and I love the way the poem flows. There is a smoothness in your approach, and it can turn into one of your poetic strengths.

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou Vatsal for your kind words. It means alot.

[Anish Gowda]

Beautiful poem.. Mother nature at its best. Again, vocabulary is fantastic. Just try to improve rhymes. Loved it

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Thankyou Anish for your suggestions!

[M P Ramesh]

aditi,

Try to catch the flying words
they are appearing as dear friends , but not exactly
they will have decivers attire
and will always be with other's clutches


good attempt indeed

keep the rhythm

mp

[Aditi Nagvanshi]

Sure Sir, definately I'll try to do my best. Thankyou for taking out your time and reviewing my work. I really Appreciate it.