Between the faces all pale with grief
She stands - a woman amongst the
ravens
My darling, she wears white to funerals
So in her wedding dress she'll be buried
Heeds no hate to others' disapproval
In my mind I've made her a deity
When I kiss her it's a silent prayer
Under the altar where we married
Gosh, golly, gee Adriana. No violent imagery, no morbid thoughts. I wasn’t really sure it was you. It is nice imagery though, the woman in white standing amongst the ravens, mourners in black suits I assume. Of course a kiss becomes a prayer when kissing a deity. That’s the second poem today I have read about making a loved one into a deity. Otherwise the poems are completely different, just one of those odd coincidences. You will have to explain the last line to me, are you literally under the altar? I did not know the work of Hozier. Thank you, I always welcome hearing of a new Irish singer/songwriter.
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Haha the last line just felt like it fit, yes i guess I am literally under the altar lol, but also n.. read moreHaha the last line just felt like it fit, yes i guess I am literally under the altar lol, but also not, it's like living the happiest moments of your life over and over again in your mind, for example your wedding, does this explanation make any sense? And thanks for reviewing my writing I always love your reviews^-^
Gosh, golly, gee Adriana. No violent imagery, no morbid thoughts. I wasn’t really sure it was you. It is nice imagery though, the woman in white standing amongst the ravens, mourners in black suits I assume. Of course a kiss becomes a prayer when kissing a deity. That’s the second poem today I have read about making a loved one into a deity. Otherwise the poems are completely different, just one of those odd coincidences. You will have to explain the last line to me, are you literally under the altar? I did not know the work of Hozier. Thank you, I always welcome hearing of a new Irish singer/songwriter.
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Haha the last line just felt like it fit, yes i guess I am literally under the altar lol, but also n.. read moreHaha the last line just felt like it fit, yes i guess I am literally under the altar lol, but also not, it's like living the happiest moments of your life over and over again in your mind, for example your wedding, does this explanation make any sense? And thanks for reviewing my writing I always love your reviews^-^
I'm Adriana, I'm 16 years old and I've loved writing ever since I learned to write, so I am on this app to share it with you and see ur writing as welll more..