The sun, the sea, the sky and the shore

The sun, the sea, the sky and the shore

A Poem by Adriana
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The sun an ice cream ball in warm sky, melts

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The sun an ice cream ball in warm sky, melts
The sea goes swallows sun whole turning red
The sky drips murky yellow to a black
The shore cold, laying under bare feet grows

© 2025 Adriana


Author's Note

Adriana
Ok Ik this isn't good but is it Iambic pentameter? It's my first attempt at it, please tell me if I actually did it right lol

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It's visual, that's for sure.. and almost perfectly. Maybe read up and then slightly change it. Am by no means an expert - but, you will be!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Adriana

1 Month Ago

Thx so much for the review^-^

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Added on February 16, 2025
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Tags: Poem, sea, water, sunset

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Adriana
Adriana

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I'm Adriana, I'm 16 years old and I've loved writing ever since I learned to write, so I am on this app to share it with you and see ur writing as welll more..

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