i knew you'll fail :)

feels weird to you

i smile as you pass by

u felt happy

for every tear

that left my eye

now you are drowning 

in that same ocean

which is full

of the rivers

my eyes cried

each night

and i' am sorry

if there is no one

to take you to the shore

and you look at me with pleading eyes

and am sorry this time i'll deny

you told me not to 

come back

now i feel

you were so right

i am so happy to

leave that filthy life

each day i tried

to protect you from that fake world

you told was your life

now it seems that world has shattered

and your are  picking the pieces 

with your broken hands

and your tears fail to fall

because they are all frozen inside

your bruised heart is

pumping venom now

so i don't have to hurt you

because hurt is on it's way

to cut you

and today i just don't feel sorry

for you

because baby i told you

on that painful night of mine

those days i failed for you

those days will surely come to you   !!

Reviews

[Jazique]

Nice I like that the world on play of the that famous saying 'What goes around, comes around" and I just love the last two lines you let shine "Those days I failed for you, those days will surely come to you! Nicely done it reminds me of the song jar of heart how the hearts he left full of tears came right back at him. So well done and I like how you placed everything.

[misscb]

I really enjoyed reading this... Well done!!!

[misscb]

I really enjoyed reading this... Well done!!!

[paradise]

very interesting poem I really enjoyed the ending great job

[Tamia123]

This is so good and so easy to relate to! I think we all feel this way sometimes......this is every emontion you can imagen put in words....I LOVE IT!!!!! Good job! Keep it up :3

[~Lizzy♬]

I love your style of writing. You use 'u' instead of 'you' and don't capitalize many of the things that do need to be capitalized. I love the uniqueness of how you write! :) You're a great poet.

~lizzy~

[Abbie]

This was an amazing write! I thought this was really good at portraying Karma. I know exactly what that feels like. nice job! =)

[Pi Cee]

Karma can be a b***h, but sometimes it's just so fun to watch. I can relate to this, and I like it. Good write.

[....]

i really liked the 3rd and 4th stanza's like the deepness,
I love this it has attitude. Amazing write!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Karma can be a b***h as they say. Nicely done!

~anna rose