i knew you'll fail :)

feels weird to you

i smile as you pass by

u felt happy

for every tear

that left my eye

now you are drowning 

in that same ocean

which is full

of the rivers

my eyes cried

each night

and i' am sorry

if there is no one

to take you to the shore

and you look at me with pleading eyes

and am sorry this time i'll deny

you told me not to 

come back

now i feel

you were so right

i am so happy to

leave that filthy life

each day i tried

to protect you from that fake world

you told was your life

now it seems that world has shattered

and your are  picking the pieces 

with your broken hands

and your tears fail to fall

because they are all frozen inside

your bruised heart is

pumping venom now

so i don't have to hurt you

because hurt is on it's way

to cut you

and today i just don't feel sorry

for you

because baby i told you

on that painful night of mine

those days i failed for you

those days will surely come to you   !!

Reviews

[Jazique]

Nice I like that the world on play of the that famous saying 'What goes around, comes around" and I just love the last two lines you let shine "Those days I failed for you, those days will surely come to you! Nicely done it reminds me of the song jar of heart how the hearts he left full of tears came right back at him. So well done and I like how you placed everything.

[msharma]

Good penning

[Blue Ivory]

Niiice :D Reminds me of Grenade by Bruno Mars.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel of karma in this poem. The story gave strength and purpose to the ending lines. The description was amazing. I could feel the memories and places you went. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jordan's Back]

Damn.... Nice poem very angry and vengful

[Lily Mae]

What we give we get in life..is what I was always told. Then later in life during my spiritual journeys I learned about Karma which is the same idea and balance. Sometimes in our pain we just have to believe that the lesson gets taught to the one that has inflicted it.. and we just trust that they too will learn from the choices they made.. I send them love and light and release them to the wind..x

[UnderCompulsion]

I love this poem!It is amazing.I especially like the last two lines.Great work! :)

[stars are far]

Nice.. This was a great piece ..
Well done :)

[Manpreet]

felt happy

for every tear

that left my eye



now you are drowning

in that same ocean


which is full

of the rivers

my eyes cried

each night



and i' am sorry

if there is no one

to take you to the shore

and you look at me with pleading eyes

and am sorry this time i'll deny


This is like redemption! Beautifully described moments when you had no one to share your pain. Check for some typo's like you wrote and your are picking the pieces should be read as and you are picking the pieces. Altogether beautiful work!

[Cassie Fraga]

4 words... ((KARMA IS A B***H!!))
very strong lines up in here... you penned it well!! thank you for sharing!!