i knew you'll fail :)

feels weird to you

i smile as you pass by

u felt happy

for every tear

that left my eye

now you are drowning 

in that same ocean

which is full

of the rivers

my eyes cried

each night

and i' am sorry

if there is no one

to take you to the shore

and you look at me with pleading eyes

and am sorry this time i'll deny

you told me not to 

come back

now i feel

you were so right

i am so happy to

leave that filthy life

each day i tried

to protect you from that fake world

you told was your life

now it seems that world has shattered

and your are  picking the pieces 

with your broken hands

and your tears fail to fall

because they are all frozen inside

your bruised heart is

pumping venom now

so i don't have to hurt you

because hurt is on it's way

to cut you

and today i just don't feel sorry

for you

because baby i told you

on that painful night of mine

those days i failed for you

those days will surely come to you   !!

Reviews

[Jazique]

Nice I like that the world on play of the that famous saying 'What goes around, comes around" and I just love the last two lines you let shine "Those days I failed for you, those days will surely come to you! Nicely done it reminds me of the song jar of heart how the hearts he left full of tears came right back at him. So well done and I like how you placed everything.

[kate]

good job! very expressive!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, I can't say how much I truly love this! I can relate to this since one of my exes always tried to make my happy but I took him forgranted and left him. I came crying back but he had already moved on with someone new. Now, I feel like crap and want him back more than anything. You write beautifully and tears fell from my face since every word connected to my heart.

"With your broken hands
And your tears fail to fall
Because they are all frozen inside"
are my favorite lines out of this beautiful piece of art. Great job, can't wait to read more of your work :)

Adding to my library!!! XD


Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[emilythestrange]

fab!And so stunningly accurate!I love the last two lines too!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

If we break hearts our own will surely be broken in turn........well done!

[Xhiljola]

outstanding write! enjoyed it

[Ruth]

I like the karmic feel to this, outstanding write love, really pushes the message forward...if someone isn't there for you, then what happens role reversal? Very powerful!
xoxo

[AK]

Really nice!

[Mad Hatter]

Real stregnth in here from something obviously heartbreaking :) Great job!

[Kenfucius69]

This poem is very true and from the heart, I can feel your emotion and relate to this. The final stanza was well done and your thoughts were spread evenly throughout. Well done!

[Sarah]

realy good but very sad