everyday i fall in love <3

read it like you''re 15 again a poem on adolescent love .... xoxoxo

every day at 10

i stand at the shop 

at the corner end...

light a cigarette

and try to pretend....

away from worries

away from blames

away from them

who just pretend

and fake 

to be friends....

move to peace

gingerly

with my smoke

and those dreams in my head.....

but today when i was 

in my smoking session

in and out of my frustration....

i saw that face

thought it's an illusion

so i just paid some attention

it was someone with an angelic smile

someone i never saw this side

she walked by

and i was flying high

had never felt this for a while

praying all these thoughts would

prove worthwhile...

thinking and blushing

i moved ahead

dreaming of the time to come

i thought about my life

to come....

so i maintained some gap

followed her with soft steps....

she moved into the parking lot

someone was sitting on that spot

he greeted her with a hug and a kiss

i screamed inside and felt a hit....

then he gave her a bunch of roses

they hugged

and gave some awkward poses

he opened the gate of his car

she went inside

like a princess

from stars....

all this while i was blaming my fate

why i was here 

so deliberate....

then i just looked back

my first one sided 

love story ended

with a small heart attack....

but the next day i was

back on my track

chasing that girl with

white legs :) 

Reviews

[Blue Ivory]

If you want my honest opinion, it could use a little work. Some grammatical errors here and there, and a bit of lack of maturity in you style. But I like the way you describe the girl and the way the guy feels about her. The topic you chose is very cute =)

[FelicityAllona]

oh my!! i can visualize everything :)


nice nice nice work :)

[paradise]

awhhhe thats such a cute story :0 i love it great job!

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sweet longing thoughts .....

Jazz ..

[patricia]

I groaned when I saw the subject, but was pleasantly surprised when the rythm and rhyme flowed superbly, you nip in with words like you've been parking cars all your life. Nice poem. Thanks.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Such a sweet write! You conveyed this piece with pure innocence..love the blushing and thinking of her... Lovely!

[AK]

Oh..that was nice!

[A Red Red Rose 4 U Luv]

Nice, loved the last stanza.