Black Valentine

a song about forgiveness and realization !!

today i sing about you

the things i feel around you

i hate to see you leaving

so can i come behind you

when you say its all over

can you see my heart bleeding

can you feel my pain inside you

i know i was hard

but for you again i will start

and today you sit so far

i cant even see inside you

i know there is still love

and you are just angry 

so let me sit besides you

and let me put my hands around you

and i swear i wont fake

and for you i will change

so today i sing about you

all the things i feel around you

you tried hard every day

grabbed that knife away from my hands

if only i was not blind

i could have felt the pain inside you

now my eyes are open

and i see those scars

of that hurt i gave

i failed to feel about you

so today i sing about you

the things i feel around you

and i say i am sorry

living without a life

i am failing to live without you

so let me sing about you

cuse its black valentine without you...........!

Reviews

[Me]

You have written this piece beautifully, great job

[Sometimes Blood]

I really enjoyed this my friend...well done

[stars are far]

thats so sad :(
well i hope i get one like this for valentine :'(
since for me it will be BLACK totally DEAD...
Great piece

[Asb]

Let us show some love yeah...cheer up
btw happy chocolate day
cheers!!

[stars are far]

haha happy chocolate day :)
:)))

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad and well written poem for Valentine days. Love can be dark on the day of love for some people. I could feel the sadness and regret in your words. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Asb]

Thanx fir the humble review sir :)

[DIVYA]

A very catchy line - "Black valentine without you" !
A lover's plea, very well expressed.

[Asb]

thanx ya :)

[prodicallife]

Dear ASB,

Black valentine, cursed, painful, damped, dreary, horror, teared.

How simply with the right flow you took me through the entire pros and corns you wanted to portray. The mistakes, the forgiveness. The unable effort to realize something then a new effort to make it done.

I hope you can sense through my words how beautifully you explained so many feelings through such limited and well selected words.

Keep up the great write.

Stay blessed
Prodical

[Asb]

yes :)
thanks for the kind review
cheers!!