Light Up - a vociemail

Hey, it's Victor here, calling in to check on you.

In case no one has whispered this to you today, 

let me be the voice to tell you

You're beautiful

More beautiful than the Milky Way.

You're strong

Stronger than anything that ever poses to be an obstacle on your way

You're powerful

More powerful than you can ever imagine.

If today your sky is shadowed by dark clouds, 

Remember that the sun is always lingering on the other side, 

Patiently waiting to glide across the horizon to brighten your world again.

In these days of trials, 

Where we are often surrounded by heartbreaking news 

And a constant barrage of despair, 

I urge you to be the anomaly. 

Be kindness incarnate

Let your smile be a lighthouse on someone's stormy day. Become the rainbow in their cloud

A beacon of hope.

As you step into your day

Pray, Work, and Stay watchful of the wolves in sheep's clothing. 

Wishing you a wonderful day ahead.

Take care, Habibi. 

Looking forward to seeing you soon!

For now, go light up your world.

Reviews

[JayG]

Your letter to your friend was, heartfelt. I don't doubt your sincerity, but have several questions:

1. Does breaking a letter into short lines really make it a poem? If it does, then everything is poetry. Right?
2. What's in it for the reader? They know neither you nor the child, friend, wife, or lover this is written to (you don't make that relationship clear). So, what can they say in response, but, "Uh...okay."?

My point is that instead of wishing this unknown person well, make the reader love them for the same reasons you do. Make THEM feel and care, not learn that you do. In other words, make it meaningful to the reader as-the-words-are-read. Instead of talking about your feelings, make the reader feel them for the same reason. That's where the joy of reading lies. And how to do that is a learned skill, not even mentioned as existing in our school days,

You might try a few chapters of Mary Oliver's, A Poetry Handbook. It's filled with useful and interesting information. The lady is a poet of note, and her book, a gem.

https://www.docdroid.net/7iE8fIJ/a-poetry-handbook-pdfdrivecom-pdf

Jay Greenstein
Articles: https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
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