Painted puppet

About life principles

What is there really out there?

 

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Why bleed when you know that

the daemons feed on blood

and the angels on your weakness…?

 

Paint your anger and distress

 

Someday you will reach

the slippery mountain top.,

and move to the next.   

 

You want to love?

You want happiness?

 

do not be naive...

 

Once the walls are down

all inside is next

to fall in truth, before

the last drop of color is shed.

 

Dance on, painted puppet,

in the storm.

sleep now in the fire.

Cheat, lie and steal

but never feel.

 

Reviews

[Annalisa]

I love the last stanza of this, as well as the two lines about demons and angles. It is so much easier to not let ourselves feel. If we can achieve that, which is nearly impossible sometimes, then it's as if nothing can hurt us. We become almost emotionally invincible, though it doesn't last. THis was a great poem, though I'm not sure I like the repetition of Fake it. and Don't be stupid. Just saying each once would get the point across and it would be a smoother read.

Great work.

[coug]

i like the imagery you create here, its very concrete and well laid out. good job!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

true harsh emotions makes me want to paint, =)

---mishel

[UpComesDown]

i feel this way sometimes... just close yourself off and everything will get better... but the sad thing is that the only thing that will make it better is having someone you love help you leaarn to love and trust again. But if you never loved or trusted in the first place then nothing would have happened. It is a bitter cold world that is just out to hurt you. Sad, but true. Sometimes it just feels better to close yourself. Good Poem. Deep and scary. True and sad. thanks for sharing.
-UpComesDown

[Rhine Wolf]

this was deep and moving in may ways, sad in the fact that you feel the need to not feel, the last stanza brought the whole piece together very nicely, well done with that.

Blessed be
Fallon

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is so dark and full of emotions, I'm sure of one thing that you know how to pull out emotions in your reader's mind.
I also loved the way you have ended it...Great work

[Larissa G.]

It's a nice start; but I don't see a lot of fantastic poetry elements giving it depth. You're relying on the ideas within it to give it a deep emotion without helping it along. So it's a nice draft; for the future I'd recommend tweaking it.

[Michael Carr]

dark and well written, you touch on moments that can seem personal to the reader, yet envoke some scope in the work. a nice voice and some decent imagery as well. could be smoother, I agree, but you pull of the work very well.
good work!

[Aileen]

luv it. i wish i couldn't feel pain. o th great desire that is. but if we could not feel pain how do we know were alive? and how do we know tht were still human? i like it. nice peace of work u have here.
luv ya
ur friend Aileen

[Wildecat]

This is a very captivating poem, a definite pleasure to read.

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I did enjoy reading this! It's quite captivating. The idea of a painted puppet is brilliant. Very well written!