Hidden

Short story about evil and the human soul

The night brings with it the darkness, my best friend, bathing the streets in silence. As the light slightly pierces the unknown, everything seems static in a crowd of creations.

Evil hides behind the silence, where beauty is an illusion and ideas the path to infinity.

Voices lure me dancing inside the maze, deceiving my soul waiting to see my world get lost in fear, where love is but a wish, surviving needlessly.

Happiness rules, as I reach the center of the black maze, ignoring the knives so close to my flesh, I find the box.

Its case resembles familiar things, holding a strange beauty, whispering…waiting.

As I open it I notice the box is me. It’s walls, it’s voices, it’s images my hidden wounds, it’s empty space my enclosure.

The mind weaves on, as the spirit bleeds screaming behind a wall of thoughts rising higher, with wasted will.  

Seeking the answers, wounds open wide drowning the voices in blood until all that is left is the silence.

Sunrise once again blesses the horizon, as I feel my demons hide.

Where the maze lied there is nothing, and the wounds seem to have faded, but the silence of the dark waits to move its pieces.

 

Author's Note

Based on a feeling I sometimes have. Hope you liked it.

A.M.

Reviews

[Gandré]

With this you lead the reader into your personal darkness - your unknown world, everything can be.....nothing yet is....Its inspiration and setting is expectation that not yet exists. " wounds open wide drowning the voices in blood until all that is left is the silence. "--------macabre world, I know there are plenty of readers that love this! could make a great story, stretch it, then I 'll come and read again? vivid imaginery, I liked!
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[Dustin Chang]

Wow that was great. Great imagery. Beautifully written.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

An excellent write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Annalisa]

This is beautiful, emotional and descriptive but without getting overwhelming. I loved this. I did see one spot that was a little awkward. In the sentence "Evil hides behind the silence, where beauty is an illusion and ideas the path to infinity." try adding a comma after ideas. Putting the comma there will make the reader pause and the flow will make the sentence make more sense on a first reading. As it is i had to go back and try to figure out what you were saying. Other than that though this is amazing and I'll be filching it for my favorites. Great work.

[Mel Stevens]

Interesting how darkness always brings out the different part of people. Like the darkness can hide their secrets better.

[Dani California]

Adela, I have to say that your word choices are brilliant.
I am often humbled by writers such as yourself, as I read
many writes each day and here and there run across what
I believe to be incredibly talented word crafters. You're one
of them...

"Sunrise once again blesses the horizon, as I feel my demons hide.
Where the maze lied there is nothing, and the wounds seem to have faded, but the silence of the dark waits to move its pieces.

Wow! Exceptional piece.... indeed