Silence

Just a little thingy for a contest.

let go, and…  

 

Fly high

in the dusty universe

of the gray empty

walls

 

sinking deeper in the maze

of thoughts and images,

crafted by hundreds

 

In the darkness I understand

the spirit’s loneliness.  

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

This is a truly great metaphor for the "human condition"...I can see alot of the human psyche flowing from these words...almost like we are being closed in by the world, and it's only in the darkness, the quiet, that we find peace enough to speak to ourselves...at least that's what I got from it. I love the simplicity of this...the form was just right. Nicely done!

[Nely Amorim]

it does have some confusing elements but then you read it twice more and it begins to make sense, at least to me, spaces in your mind or confinement within.. I liked it :D thanks for entering my contest :)

[Gandré]

you have surfaced the unheard voices in you and our society, going beyond nostalgic feeling to human emotions that requires your response. this was very sweet and accurate.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words express so well the feelings and thoughts wandering in my mind right now... Your work is so beautifully expressive and contemplative!

Craig

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Adela,

I am very confused by your poem. Like the other reviewers, in the later lines of the poem I feel closed in, and that you are cornered. But this files in the face of the opening lines. Both "let go..." and "Fly high..." seem to indicate freedom. So which is it? Are you surrounded by a universe with "...gray / empty walls..." or are you flying high? I feel there is a message here, but I get mixed signals. Perhaps I simply don't understand.

Best regards,

Rick

[Larissa G.]

Such deep meanings for such simple little phrases. They all flow together really well, combining to form a gorgeous and even chilling though for us to see.
Thanks for sharing.

[angelina neves]

very beautifully done

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very vivid imagery and nicely written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Helena]

Wonderful poem that certainly conveyed loneliness so well and each
stanza went deeper into the moment...

"In the darkness I understand
the spirit's loneliness."

Well done and thank you for submitting this to my "Keeping the Dream Alive" contest ! ~ Helena ~