Adela, one word comes to mind--bold. I like the economy of language, but not just the economy but the careful selection of strong verbs and vivid adjectives and a pacing that slaps one up side the head and then back down again. This poem, this vision, your words, here, now, attack the reader with passion and depth and a rawness that makes one want to strip the veneer from our bodies and swim in the lake of eternal authenticity. In other words, I liked this poem very, very much. :-)
Adela, one word comes to mind--bold. I like the economy of language, but not just the economy but the careful selection of strong verbs and vivid adjectives and a pacing that slaps one up side the head and then back down again. This poem, this vision, your words, here, now, attack the reader with passion and depth and a rawness that makes one want to strip the veneer from our bodies and swim in the lake of eternal authenticity. In other words, I liked this poem very, very much. :-)
This is like reading a classic case of " We are our own worst enemies ". It is well written and intense. I think we all have felt like this at times. Excellent read.
Debby
Yes we often become who we are not and you made that perfect clear with such a raw emotion. The words have such a power behind them and I love the structure you went with in this poem. It was a marvelous write, bravo my dear.
Heya,
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