In the silence

In the silence

A Poem by Adela Muresan
"

Funny how many things stay hidden�in the silence.

"

the black thorns sank into my flesh…

and pain exploded inside me.

 

I lay

 

on the cold pedestal in blood

dripped from my skin.

 

Shivers spread   

as my stifled screams echo trough the tunnels…

 

 

 

Black deep tunnels…  

with long cold whispers…

 

 

 

She raises from my marble case again.

 

Pink eyes glimmer, with evil, as she laughs …

 

my laugh

 

as she stains

my body

 

as she strangles

my dreams

 

becoming once again

 

me.     

 

© 2008 Adela Muresan


Author's Note

Adela Muresan
Often we become what we are not.

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Adela, one word comes to mind--bold. I like the economy of language, but not just the economy but the careful selection of strong verbs and vivid adjectives and a pacing that slaps one up side the head and then back down again. This poem, this vision, your words, here, now, attack the reader with passion and depth and a rawness that makes one want to strip the veneer from our bodies and swim in the lake of eternal authenticity. In other words, I liked this poem very, very much. :-)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Not are we
what become we
often - - read backwards to discover source- word games are fun-

poetry is everywhere
thanks for your contribution
my skin feels raw when i read your words




Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adela, one word comes to mind--bold. I like the economy of language, but not just the economy but the careful selection of strong verbs and vivid adjectives and a pacing that slaps one up side the head and then back down again. This poem, this vision, your words, here, now, attack the reader with passion and depth and a rawness that makes one want to strip the veneer from our bodies and swim in the lake of eternal authenticity. In other words, I liked this poem very, very much. :-)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is like reading a classic case of " We are our own worst enemies ". It is well written and intense. I think we all have felt like this at times. Excellent read.
Debby

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cool way you have written the words here. adds to the writing and made me think as I was reading it. you are so right! x

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chilling and visual. This thought lingered for me:

Shivers spread
as my stifled screams echo trough the tunnels�

Silence blends seamlessly with darkness in this piece.
So nicely done!

((Hugs and LOve)) ~SilentDream


Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Yes we often become who we are not and you made that perfect clear with such a raw emotion. The words have such a power behind them and I love the structure you went with in this poem. It was a marvelous write, bravo my dear.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I hope that I never have a nightmare as vivid as this or as bloodcurdling.
Tom

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

profoundly disturbing nightmare scenario M'Lady Well written and presented

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

*shivers* This sounds like a horrible nightmare, to me. I hope I never have it. But a powerful composition nonetheless. My favorite section:

"Pink eyes glimmer, with evil, as she laughs �
my laugh

as she stains
my body

as she strangles
my dreams"

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Adela Muresan
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Heya, I'm a 18 year old chick for Romania, studying first year economics in college. I dance while I put my clothes back on the drawer. I like late night net-surfing , reading and reading and read.. more..

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